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Tinanam0102 Posted 16 years ago
Grammar

Would you check my sentence structure?

Hi teachers,

1. I once worked at a children workshop in Taiwan, where I had my on-job training teaching exceptional children with arts and crafts, after graduating from college.



2. I once worked at a children workshop in Taiwan after graduating from college, where I had my on-job training teaching exceptional children with arts and crafts.

I don't know if I should put "after graduating from college" after "...in Taiwan", but then the "where I had my on-job..." would seem to describe "college".

Does the meaning totally different?

Thank you

Tinanam
  

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After graduating from college, I once worked at a children's workshop in Taiwan, where I had my on-job training teaching arts and crafts to exceptional children.

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After graduating from college, I once worked at a children's workshop in Taiwan, where I had my on-job training teaching arts and crafts to exceptional children.
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Hi Mister Micawber,

Thank you for your correction. I'd like to understand more about this structure.

1. I understand you have put "After graduating...." at the front of the sentence, could I know if it is correct to put it after "......exceptional children."?

2. Is "teaching exceptional children arts and crafts" correct?

Thank you.

Tinanam
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for me it's correct
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Hello Tinanam,

#1 & 2-- It is not a matter of correctness, but clarity. I fronted the adverbial precisely to avoid your original dilemma, neither solution to which was very clear. I moved 'arts & crafts' for the same reason.
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Hi Mister Micawber,

Thank you for explaining clearly.

Tinanam
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