Uktous Posted 17 years ago
Grammar
Which sentence is better?
I successfully demonstrated, and developed, all key attributes stated in your company’s website in my past career
I successfully demonstrated and developed all key attributes stated in your company’s website in my past career
or honestly both bad?
I successfully demonstrated and developed all key attributes stated in your company’s website in my past career
or honestly both bad?
Top answer
To help with modification issues, I would place "in my past career" at the beginning of the sentence; otherwise it sounds like that phrase is modifying 'website'. I have no problem with the commas, either way. The commas serve to accentuate 'developed'.
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To help with modification issues, I would place "in my past career" at the beginning of the sentence; otherwise it sounds like that phrase is modifying 'website'.
I have no problem with the commas, either way. The commas serve to accentuate 'developed'. It may even be better to omit 'and developed'. I think that 'successfully demonstrated' would be enough.
I have no problem with the commas, either way. The commas serve to accentuate 'developed'. It may even be better to omit 'and developed'. I think that 'successfully demonstrated' would be enough.
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Well, the second is the better, but both are vague and stilted. It would be better to specify. Use a couple of sentences.
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