Anonymous Posted 21 years ago
Letter Writing
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I am twenty-two year postgraduate student .I graduated in “XXXXXXXXXXXX” in July 2005 from the XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX. My major was computer networking and my diploma thesis was: XXXXXXXXX.
I have some previous work experience as I worked at summer vacations for 3 years, and this taught me the value of teamwork and commitment. I am also very familiar with a number of computer software, including Microsoft Word, Excel, Access, Windows, and Linux.
I am a conceptual thinker, a generator of creative ideas, and a self-starter. I am very keen to apply my theoretical skills in practical work, especially in my study major Computer networking. I am also very interesting in learning more about XXXXXXXX, because in the future I would like to overtake my father’s company.
Thank you very much for considering my application.
I have some previous work experience as I worked at summer vacations for 3 years, and this taught me the value of teamwork and commitment. I am also very familiar with a number of computer software, including Microsoft Word, Excel, Access, Windows, and Linux.
I am a conceptual thinker, a generator of creative ideas, and a self-starter. I am very keen to apply my theoretical skills in practical work, especially in my study major Computer networking. I am also very interesting in learning more about XXXXXXXX, because in the future I would like to overtake my father’s company.
Thank you very much for considering my application.
Top answer
I presume that this is to be accompanied by your CV in application for a job? You need to supply a bit more detail as to the nature of your summer jobs. At 22, we can hardly categorize ourselves as conceptual thinkers , etc-- at least that sentence sounds somewhat pompous to me.
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I presume that this is to be accompanied by your CV in application for a job?
You need to supply a bit more detail as to the nature of your summer jobs. At 22, we can hardly categorize ourselves as conceptual thinkers, etc-- at least that sentence sounds somewhat pompous to me. I would eliminate it in favour of some more practical indication of your training, skills and ab
You need to supply a bit more detail as to the nature of your summer jobs. At 22, we can hardly categorize ourselves as conceptual thinkers, etc-- at least that sentence sounds somewhat pompous to me. I would eliminate it in favour of some more practical indication of your training, skills and ab
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