Cheese1987 Posted 20 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
urgent please help me to correct this article.
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00 I am cindy. I am currently a year 1 student in the Management and Marketing Department of Chinese University. i would like to introduce my academic acheievement first. 02 br
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00 As you can see at the form that, i have gained 3 distinctions and a Credit in Hong Kong Advanced Level Examination. In fact , i was only an indifferent students before. You can see my result of HKCEE is not very good. to get this great improvement, i deeply believe diligence is important. everything can be done as long as you work hard. 02 br
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00 As for the aspect of extra - curricular activity, i have joined chinese orchestra since i was form 1. i have played Liuqin for 7 years. do you know what liuqin is? it is a chinese instrument. now i participate in polytechnic university 's chinese orchestra and north district chinese orchestra. Since i am the member of chinese , i have an opportunity to act some performances. i have justed acted on December, also, i have a chance to give a performance 2 weeks later, and in the coming months. 02 br
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00 Because i am interested in music, i have paid much effort on it. Therefore, I luckily awarded the second place and the third place in liuqin competition in HK Schools Music Festival when i was f.2 and f.4. Apart from my music achievement, I have joined the PTU Choral Speaking Competition, luckily again i was award first place in HK Schools Speech Festival when i was f.6 02 br
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00 i have also contributed to my secondary school when i was a college student. i was a school librarian and the captain of the school chinese orchestra. in addition to school services, i also participate in the flag - selling activity and walkathon of the Tung Wah Group of Hospital since i was f.4. as i am a member of community youth club, i have a chance to do some social services such as visiting the elderly, helping the disabled person. i believe those services are meaningful. not only can the people to be helped but also i can understand i am so happiness. 02 br
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00 Although i have some achievement in those parts, i think i am not a all- rounded person as i am not good at english. it is my main weakness. So i hopfully i can study oversea. By studing in other countries, i believe my listening and my oral skill can be greatly improved. but i have a misgiving that my family cannot afford this tuition fee and the cost of living. so i hopfully hk jockey club can give me a hand and help me to achieve this goal. 0-
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00 I am cindy. I am currently a year 1 student in the Management and Marketing Department of Chinese University. i would like to introduce my academic acheievement first. 02 br
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00 As you can see at the form that, i have gained 3 distinctions and a Credit in Hong Kong Advanced Level Examination. In fact , i was only an indifferent students before. You can see my result of HKCEE is not very good. to get this great improvement, i deeply believe diligence is important. everything can be done as long as you work hard. 02 br
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00 As for the aspect of extra - curricular activity, i have joined chinese orchestra since i was form 1. i have played Liuqin for 7 years. do you know what liuqin is? it is a chinese instrument. now i participate in polytechnic university 's chinese orchestra and north district chinese orchestra. Since i am the member of chinese , i have an opportunity to act some performances. i have justed acted on December, also, i have a chance to give a performance 2 weeks later, and in the coming months. 02 br
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00 Because i am interested in music, i have paid much effort on it. Therefore, I luckily awarded the second place and the third place in liuqin competition in HK Schools Music Festival when i was f.2 and f.4. Apart from my music achievement, I have joined the PTU Choral Speaking Competition, luckily again i was award first place in HK Schools Speech Festival when i was f.6 02 br
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00 i have also contributed to my secondary school when i was a college student. i was a school librarian and the captain of the school chinese orchestra. in addition to school services, i also participate in the flag - selling activity and walkathon of the Tung Wah Group of Hospital since i was f.4. as i am a member of community youth club, i have a chance to do some social services such as visiting the elderly, helping the disabled person. i believe those services are meaningful. not only can the people to be helped but also i can understand i am so happiness. 02 br
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00 Although i have some achievement in those parts, i think i am not a all- rounded person as i am not good at english. it is my main weakness. So i hopfully i can study oversea. By studing in other countries, i believe my listening and my oral skill can be greatly improved. but i have a misgiving that my family cannot afford this tuition fee and the cost of living. so i hopfully hk jockey club can give me a hand and help me to achieve this goal. 0-
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0 I suggest you capitalize all your i's, the first word of every sentence, and the proper nouns, and we'll go from there. 02 br 02 br 00 Hope this helps. :-) 0-
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0 I suggest you capitalize all your i's, the first word of every sentence, and the proper nouns, and we'll go from there. 02 br
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00 Is this a JUPAS transfer? 02 br
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00 Hope this helps. :-) 0-
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00 Is this a JUPAS transfer? 02 br
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00 Hope this helps. :-) 0-
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0 In fact, it is a draft of speech. In addition to the capitalization, what anything wrong abount the content and grammar? thanks~! 0-
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0 It will be easier to correct if you repost with the capitals, as suggested 0-
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0 I am Cindy. I am currently a year 1 student in the Management and Marketing Department of Chinese University. i would like to introduce my academic acheievement first. 02 br
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00 As you can see at the form that, i have gained 3 distinctions and a Credit in Hong Kong Advanced Level Examination. In fact , i was only an indifferent students before. You can see my result of HKCE
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00 As you can see at the form that, i have gained 3 distinctions and a Credit in Hong Kong Advanced Level Examination. In fact , i was only an indifferent students before. You can see my result of HKCE
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0 Only the glaring mistakes. I've highlighted or bolded them. Please fix them and repost your speech. 01 blockquote
01 cite 10 Cheese1987 12 cite 10 I am Cindy. I am currently a year 1 student in the Management and Marketing Department of 11 b 10 Chinese University (full name) 12 b 10 . 11 b 10 i 12 b 10 would like to 11 b
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10 Only the glaring mistakes. I've highlighted or bolded them. Please fix them and repost your speech. 11 blockquote11 cite 20 Cheese1987 22 cite 20 I am Cindy. I am currently a year 1 student in the Management and Marketing Department of 21 b 20 Chinese Univer
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0 Only the glaring mistakes. I've highlighted or bolded them. Please fix them and repost your speech. 01 blockquote
01 cite 10 Cheese1987 12 cite 10 I am Cindy. I am currently a year 1 student in the Management and Marketing Department of 11 b 10 Chinese University (full name of the university 10 ) 12 b 10 . 11 b 10 i 12 b 10 w
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