The story of Henry

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Hello everybody,It is my first story, I make it short so you do not become boring.I would like to tell me what are my mistakes and yours suggestion******************************************************Henry is a very clever boy, he is fifteen years old, every day he wake up at 7 clock watching his face brushing his teeth and having his breakfastby 8 clock he should be in the school that is near Henry's house.One day he waked up but he felt sick, his parent was worried about him they called  family's doctor and the doctor told him that " Henry is going to stay ill for three days before he going to become better"Henry's friends was missing him then they decided to visit him and gave him a bunch of flowers.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

Welcome to the Forum.

It is my first story, I make it short so you do not become bored.

I would like you to tell me what are my mistakes and your suggestion

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Henry is a very clever boy. He is fifteen years old. Every day he wakes up

at 7 clock, washes his face, brushes his teeth and has his breakfast.

By 8 clock he should be in the school that is near his house.

One day he woke up but he felt sick. His parents were worried about him.

They called the family's doctor and the doctor told them " Henry is going to

stay ill for three days before he is going to become better".

Henry's friends were missing him, son they decided to visit him and gave him a bunch of flowers.

I've made various corrections. You need to learn not to join sentences with commas. For example,

Henry is a very clever boy, he is fifteen years old, every day he wake up is really three separate sentences.

Pleae write another story, if you would like to.

Best wishes, Clive

Evil_killer · Answer

I would like to say a big thank you for Clive.

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