Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Summary
hi, are the following descriptions grammatically correct?
Short description
As the Indonesia's pioneer of aerospace engineering industry, Rudy's dawn is not always bright. He faces his stance leading a battle in the nation, but he believes in his dream - and he is right.
Long description
Rudy spins a yarn of B.J. Habibie's youth, a visionary who pioneers Indonesia's aerospace engineering. Amidst the nation's struggle post-independence, Rudy packs his big dream for her to Germany to study. His late father's words; "Be a water spring, but tears," resonates in him and supports him to realize the dream, but he has to face opposition of his viewpoints, which soon turn into tears, and tears turn into bloodsheds, and eventually, bloodsheds turn into souls.
Short description
As the Indonesia's pioneer of aerospace engineering industry, Rudy's dawn is not always bright. He faces his stance leading a battle in the nation, but he believes in his dream - and he is right.
Long description
Rudy spins a yarn of B.J. Habibie's youth, a visionary who pioneers Indonesia's aerospace engineering. Amidst the nation's struggle post-independence, Rudy packs his big dream for her to Germany to study. His late father's words; "Be a water spring, but tears," resonates in him and supports him to realize the dream, but he has to face opposition of his viewpoints, which soon turn into tears, and tears turn into bloodsheds, and eventually, bloodsheds turn into souls.
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Your text is difficult to follow. Please rewrite it in plain and simple English.
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Your text is difficult to follow. Please rewrite it in plain and simple English.
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Rudy is an aircraft engineering genius with a big dream of creating an aircraft for his country. However, to achieve his goal he goes to Germany to study. While living in Germany, he has to learn to overcome his homesickness, make new friends and face betrayal among his fellow Indonesian college mates. There, he meets and falls in love with a German student named Ilona, who truly belie
Rudy is an aircraft engineering genius with a big dream of creating an aircraft for his country. However, to achieve his goal he goes to Germany to study. While living in Germany, he has to learn to overcome his homesickness, make new friends and face betrayal among his fellow Indonesian college mates. There, he meets and falls in love with a German student named Ilona, who truly belie
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How about this revised summary:
Rudy is an aircraft engineering genius with a big dream of creating an aircraft for his country. However, to achieve his goal he goes to Germany to study. While living in Germany, he has to learn to overcome his homesickness, make new friends and face betrayal among his fellow Indonesian college mates. Unexpectedly, he meets and falls in love with a German
Rudy is an aircraft engineering genius with a big dream of creating an aircraft for his country. However, to achieve his goal he goes to Germany to study. While living in Germany, he has to learn to overcome his homesickness, make new friends and face betrayal among his fellow Indonesian college mates. Unexpectedly, he meets and falls in love with a German
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