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Hi there againI have some sentences that I would like you to take a look at:I am out shopping I often go to a café with my friends. I earn a little money for this, by cleaning the stairs where I live.We usually spend the winter holiday in Sweden, we travel with my uncle and aunt and my two cousins, with whom we rent a house. Every year I spend a week with my grandmother, aunt and cousins in the summer house, during that week we go to the beach and have fun. I am very fond of animals and very interested in animals especially mammals, which I think are very fascinating.I practice MTV-dance and go swimming in my free time. I love films both real films and animated films, such as Disney and Pixar, a mutual interest that me and my father share. Which are always hot and freshly baked, when you buy them at the baker.  Hope that you are going to help me!

Deborah_d · Accepted Answer

When I am out shopping I often go to a café with my friends. I earn a little money ["to spend" may be better?] by cleaning the stairs where I live.

We usually spend the winter holiday in Sweden. We travel with my uncle and aunt and my two cousins, with whom we rent a house.

Every year I spend a week with my grandmother, aunt and cousins in the summer house. During [or, "house and"] that week we go to the beach and have fun.

I am very fond of animals and very interested in animals especially mammals [and very interested in them], which I think are ~~very~~ fascinating [fascinating means very interesting - you can't have 'very' fascinating].

I practice MTV-dance and go swimming in my free time.

I love films, both real films and animated films, such as Disney and Pixar, a ~~mutual~~ interest that me and my father share. [either 'a mutual interest for my father and me' or 'an interest my father and I share']

[text missing: I buy/like rolls? cakes?], which are always hot and freshly baked, when you buy them at the baker.

Lo2 · Answer

Once again thank you very much

I have two follow up questions:

What do you mean by "spend" in the first sentence? The point is that she earns money by cleaning the stairs. So I do not quite understand that "spend". Could you please clarify?

And the last sentence.The whole sentence is:

I am crazy about their baguettes, which are always hot and freshly bakd, when you buy them at the baker.

I was just not sure that "at the baker" was correct. So what do you say about that?

Deborah_d · Answer

It's just not totally clear what 'this' is in the sentence, so I thought I'd make it a bit clearer by saying 'to spend', but your version is ok too.

'Baker' is ok, but in UK English we'd usually say 'the bakers' or 'the baker's' - I guess it's short for 'baker's shop'.

Yico · Answer

there are too many 'i' ...

I am very fond of animals...

I practice MTV-dance and ...

I love films both real films ...

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