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Should people be judge by thier potential rather than by thier experiences and achievement? Please grade my essay for sat test i am weak in essay writing
People should be judge by thier potential not by thier experience and achievement because achievement does'nt matter.the thing that matter is that how much ability in the person to do the work or how much potential He has. My stance can be proved with the elaboration of some examples of Walt Disney , Thomas edison , and Albert Einstein.
Firstly, Lord of animated cartoon character, Walt disney.he was terminated from his position stating that he is not creative.No one knew that how much ability he has to do the work after few years he sketch the most realistic cartoon characters which were applauded in the whole world .
Moreover, Albert Einstein , remembered by the whole world for his intelligence .when he applied in a university for the position of professor he was asked to present a thesis And then he for the very first time presented his theory was relatively which was degraded by the mentors. That he has not any experiences and achievements then he worked on it day and night and made it undeniable.
In addition, inventor of bulb, Albert Einstien. In the early years teachers told edison that he was too stupid to learn any thing .work was not better and he was fired from his forst two jobs for not being productive enough.Even as an inventor Edisom made 1000 unsucessful attempts at inventing bulb and atlast found yhe recipe of sucess ..resulter in the design that worked.
In conclusion , it is clear from my above examples that by thier ability and potential he has not by thier achievements and experiences.
Firstly, Lord of animated cartoon character, Walt disney.he was terminated from his position stating that he is not creative.No one knew that how much ability he has to do the work after few years he sketch the most realistic cartoon characters which were applauded in the whole world .
Moreover, Albert Einstein , remembered by the whole world for his intelligence .when he applied in a university for the position of professor he was asked to present a thesis And then he for the very first time presented his theory was relatively which was degraded by the mentors. That he has not any experiences and achievements then he worked on it day and night and made it undeniable.
In addition, inventor of bulb, Albert Einstien. In the early years teachers told edison that he was too stupid to learn any thing .work was not better and he was fired from his forst two jobs for not being productive enough.Even as an inventor Edisom made 1000 unsucessful attempts at inventing bulb and atlast found yhe recipe of sucess ..resulter in the design that worked.
In conclusion , it is clear from my above examples that by thier ability and potential he has not by thier achievements and experiences.
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I highlighted and underlined the worst errors.
People should be judge by thier potential not by thier experience and achievement because achievement does'nt matter.
People should be judge by thier potential not by thier experience and achievement because achievement does'nt matter.
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Does my examples of Thomas Edison, Walt Disney and ALbert Einstein are correct?
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You have many spelling errors in your essay.
You have many punctuation errors in your essay.
Next, make sure each sentence has a subject and a verb.
A sentence must have a main clause.
Your ideas are good, but you can improve your essay by writing
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Thank you.but one thing i can not understand.people should be judged by thier potential not by thier experiences and achievements. Why you underlined thier?? Poeple is plural so it can't b come? What can be come?
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Thank you.but one thing i can not understand.people should be judged by thier their potential not by thier their experiences and achievements.
Thier is not a word in English, but their is.
Because you do not spell this word correctly.
Why have you underlined thier??
Thier is not a word in English, but their is.
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People must neither be judged by their potential nor with their experience. Ones Potential should never be judged, it must be embraced. There are instances of people being judged by their potential, despite this fact they made their name in the world. For instance; Henry Ford, Bill Gates, Issac Newton, Abraham Lincoln, Elvis presley...& many more were initially judged...
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