Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
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Hi! Is this short sentence structured correctly? Are both of these sentences correct, short and long? I'm confident about the long sentence there are no errors. If “yes”, please indicate the mistakes.
Short sentence
When there is no love between the two, Anita, a woman with mental illness returns to avenge on her biological sister, Julia after a long-hidden revenge.
Long sentence
Anita is a woman with mental illness, due to being physically and mentally abused by her adoptive parents who are also black magic users. After killing her adoptive parents, Anita finds her ray of hope when she meets doctor Farhan. But her hopes are crushed when she finds out that Farhan is the fiance of her biological sister, Julia. After disappearing during Farhan and Julia's wedding ceremony, Anita returns with a long-hidden grudge.
Short sentence
When there is no love between the two, Anita, a woman with mental illness returns to avenge on her biological sister, Julia after a long-hidden revenge.
Long sentence
Anita is a woman with mental illness, due to being physically and mentally abused by her adoptive parents who are also black magic users. After killing her adoptive parents, Anita finds her ray of hope when she meets doctor Farhan. But her hopes are crushed when she finds out that Farhan is the fiance of her biological sister, Julia. After disappearing during Farhan and Julia's wedding ceremony, Anita returns with a long-hidden grudge.
Top answer
Anonymous Is this short sentence structured correctly? No. Anonymous I'm confident about the long sentence there are no errors.
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Anonymous Is this short sentence structured correctly?No.
AnonymousI'm confident about the long sentence there are no errors.Almost.
I've underlined the mistakes:
When there is no love between the two, Anita, a woman with mental illness returns to avenge on her biological sister, Julia af
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Thank you for letting me know the mistakes. I'm wondering what's wrong with the underlined words? Could you please describe in details?
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I got it, thank you. I made some revisions as below, please check.
When there is no love between the two, Anita, a woman with mental disorder comes to revenge her biological sister, Julia, after a long-hiddengrudge.
Anita is a woman with mental disorder due to being physically and mentally abused by her adoptive parents who are also black magic users. After killin
When there is no love between the two, Anita, a woman with mental disorder comes to revenge her biological sister, Julia, after a long-hiddengrudge.
Anita is a woman with mental disorder due to being physically and mentally abused by her adoptive parents who are also black magic users. After killin
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When there is no love between the two, Anita, a woman with mental illness, comes to revenge herself upon her biological sister, Julia, after a long-hidden grudge.
Anita is a woman with a mental disorder because she was physically and mentally abused by her adoptive parents, who are also black magic practitioners. After killing her adopti
Anita is a woman with a mental disorder because she was physically and mentally abused by her adoptive parents, who are also black magic practitioners. After killing her adopti
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Thank you, Mister Micawber. I don't see any mistakes when I read it, but you can spotted them. I have to practice a lot more.
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