Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
Grammar
question regarding paragraph example
I have a few questions regarding the below paragraph:
"The purpose of this study is to find out if children's imaginative play behaviour is different depending on complexity of a sand-play area, and provide a guide for promoting imaginative play of children. To achieve this, whether there are differences in imaginative play's type and essential factors is examined, and whether these differences are dependent on the age of children."
- "children's imaginitive play behaviour is different" or "children's imaginitive play behaviours are different"?
- "promoting imaginitive play of children" or "promoting imaginitive plays of children"?
- "in imaginitive play's type" or "type of imaginitive plays" or "imaginitive plays' types"? Is the first one OK?
- in "whether there are differences in imaginative play's type and essential factors is examined".. should the bold one be 'are', or is it fine? I have a little trouble discerning what it's refering to.
- can you please edit the paragraph to make it more natural / get rid of errors?
Hope it's not too many questions, thanks.
"The purpose of this study is to find out if children's imaginative play behaviour is different depending on complexity of a sand-play area, and provide a guide for promoting imaginative play of children. To achieve this, whether there are differences in imaginative play's type and essential factors is examined, and whether these differences are dependent on the age of children."
- "children's imaginitive play behaviour is different" or "children's imaginitive play behaviours are different"?
- "promoting imaginitive play of children" or "promoting imaginitive plays of children"?
- "in imaginitive play's type" or "type of imaginitive plays" or "imaginitive plays' types"? Is the first one OK?
- in "whether there are differences in imaginative play's type and essential factors is examined".. should the bold one be 'are', or is it fine? I have a little trouble discerning what it's refering to.
- can you please edit the paragraph to make it more natural / get rid of errors?
Hope it's not too many questions, thanks.
Top answer
Something like this, perhaps: The purpose of this study is to examine whether children's imaginative play behaviour differs with complexity of a sand play area, and to develop a guide for promoting imaginative play. Age and other differences in imaginative play type and their essential factors are examined.
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Something like this, perhaps:
The purpose of this study is to examine whether children's imaginative play behaviour differs with complexity of a sand play area, and to develop a guide for promoting imaginative play. Age and other differences in imaginative play type and their essential factors are examined.
The purpose of this study is to examine whether children's imaginative play behaviour differs with complexity of a sand play area, and to develop a guide for promoting imaginative play. Age and other differences in imaginative play type and their essential factors are examined.
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