Question about Proper use of comma

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Is this proper english? Should it be revised?

The breadth of my experience includes Treasury functions and analytics, derivatives and forex analytics, research compilation, client interaction, and presentation to high level employees, and more.

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Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

The breadth of my experience includes is an awkward expression.

I suggest My broad experience includes . . .

But really, my advice is to avoid simply making long lists. Instead, focus on the key parts that will get you the job, and leave the rest in your resume.

Clive

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