Anonymous Posted 13 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
pls creiique and rate 1 - 10 Bless
Our feet are used of course to take us from point A to point B, including air and sea transportation.
This sense of aim, direction and purpose is not a problem in terms of clarification of our destined area, not forgetting confronted financial challenges that may hinder our travels.
What about our life’s purpose and destiny? How clear are we about it? How can we claim to know right from wrong, but rarely our purpose? Especially when we are accountable of our age? How long should it take for one to know there purpose? Many claim not to know but they are pursuing it unconsciously.
We do things for a living and earn a salary regardless if we like it or not. We all contribute giving service one way or the other. Do you believe that your business career is what you are? Why did you come on earth? Just to work and pay bills? Paying bills of course is necessary, but other things are missing. What are you doing about you Soul and Spirit? How do you live with your fellow men?
This sense of aim, direction and purpose is not a problem in terms of clarification of our destined area, not forgetting confronted financial challenges that may hinder our travels.
What about our life’s purpose and destiny? How clear are we about it? How can we claim to know right from wrong, but rarely our purpose? Especially when we are accountable of our age? How long should it take for one to know there purpose? Many claim not to know but they are pursuing it unconsciously.
We do things for a living and earn a salary regardless if we like it or not. We all contribute giving service one way or the other. Do you believe that your business career is what you are? Why did you come on earth? Just to work and pay bills? Paying bills of course is necessary, but other things are missing. What are you doing about you Soul and Spirit? How do you live with your fellow men?
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I'm afraid that your rating would be about 3. I see some good ideas in there, but some of your phrasing is non-native, and the structure of your essay is amorphous. It is full of questions with no answers.
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I'm afraid that your rating would be about 3. I see some good ideas in there, but some of your phrasing is non-native, and the structure of your essay is amorphous. It is full of questions with no answers.
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I'm afraid it is not good writing. Some parts are better than others, but the reader is often left puzzling. Here are three places where I was lost.
AnonymousOur feet are used of course to take us from point A to point B, including air and sea transportation.I suppose feet can be used for swimming, but flying???
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