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0Government does not do a good job in helping the poor. According to governments' data in 2005 , the number of  poor family has increased at 80000 household as double as the data of 1996 with 40000 household. Furthermore. government legislate some policies as unfair to low income groups .For example those registered labour unions would have to pay NT$24 per month for national health insurance, compared with average income groups. As a result, the gap between the poor and rich in Taiwan has extended widely since 2000.02br02br00 Recently government has focused on reducing the unemployed rate and also tried finding efficient strategies. By contrast , it seems to be fail because the unemployed rate has gone up significantly , particularly in rural areas. In addition , government opens cheaper working from south-east Asia.Therefoer companies prefer hiring those workers rather than Taiwanese.It is obviosly that government has just shown the policies about umemployed, in fact , government does not execute the policies in Taiwan.02br02br00   Thanks 0-

Nona the brit · Accepted Answer

0You have problems with determiners, plurals, verb tenses, prepositions and general grammatical structure. I've corrected the first paragraph for you and highlighed problems in the second. In the second paragraph you have started inserting a space before commas, which is incorrect.02br
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01b00The02b00 government does not do a good job in helping the poor. According to 01b00the02b00 governments' data in 2005 , the number of poor 01b00families 02b00has increased 01b00to02b00 01b0080,00002b00 01b00households,02b00 01b00doubling from the02b00 01b001996 figure of02b00 01b0040,000 households02b00. Furthermore01b00, some government legislation is02b00 unfair to low income groups .For example01b00,02b00 those registered 01b00with02b00 labour unions 01b00have02b00 to pay NT$24 per month for national health insurance, (01b00compared with average income groups - you can't say this without clearly stating the comparison. Is it double the amount average income groups pay, for example?)02b00. As a result, the gap between the poor and rich in Taiwan has extended widely since 2000.02br
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00 Recently government00 00has focused on reducing the 00unemployed00 rate and also tried 00finding 00efficient strategies. 00By contrast00 , it seems to be 00fail 00because the 00unemployed00 rate has gone up significantly 01b00, 02b00particularly in rural areas. In addition 01b00,02b00 00government 00opens cheaper working00 from south-east Asia.00Therefoer 00companies prefer 00hiring 00those workers rather than Taiwanese.It is 00obviosly00 that00 government00 has just 00shown 00the policies 00about 00umemployed00, in fact ,00 government00 does not execute the policies in Taiwan.0-

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