Please review my letter of motivation

I have written this letter as a part of the application. Only request was to write why I want to go to the particular school.


University of New York in Prague
Eva Karlíková
Admissions Coordinators for Undergraduate Programs





Dear Madam:


I am writing to apply for the Bachelor’s Program in Business Administration at the University of New York in Prague.

While researching schools I found that your university offers me a great opportunity to get an education in business and still continue to improve my use of the English language. I have studied in the United States for 2 years; however, I have decided that it would be more cost effective to return to complete my education in the Czech Republic. I would like to finish my bachelor's degree and then continue on and complete my master’s degree in business administration. My future goal is to work my way up through a company and earn a good management position.

I feel that I have the academic qualities and people skills necessary to earn a degree in business administration. I would like to be a leader, not a follower, at whichever company I work for. I have played ice hockey for many years and I feel that it has helped to foster these qualities. Hockey has helped me to learn the commitment necessary for success as an individual and how to work as a team member. As a goalie I knew my teammates were relying on me to help win a game as much as I relied on them. I think the business world is the same way. Everybody works as a team and must count on one another to work towards success.

I hope you will consider me for acceptance to your university. It would be a great experience to attend this school and continue my education here; I am looking forward to hearing from you.



Yours sincerely,

Jiri Frkal