Griffin Posted 16 years ago
Letter Writing
Please I need help me with my cover letter
Hello everyone,
Please help me to review my cover letter if it has any grammar mistakes.===
Dear Mr. xxxxxx,
I am interested in applying for the position of Network Administrator at xxxxx, which was posted in June 23th in your company’s Web site. The opportunity presented in this listing is very appealing, and I believe that my experience and education will make me a competitive candidate for this position.
I have been working as a network and server administrator from 2004 to 2008. I worked as a Network Administrator in Ministry of Health. I assisted the IT Department in setting-up, maintaining, and troubleshooting the local network. I have excellent knowledge of network devices and services like DNS, DHCP, VPN and IIS. I have the ability to monitor the network traffic using SNMP and provide security to both LANs and WANs.
I graduated from the College of Telecom and Information with a high GPA (4.9 out of 5.0). Moreover, I have CCNA, MCSE, and ICDL certificates which help me to improve my skills in networking and make me feel confident in my job.
Please refer to the accompanying résumé to provide you with further details of my qualifications, in consideration for this position. I would enjoy being a part of your company. Please call me at (xxx) xxx-xxxx to arrange an interview at your convenience.
Sincerely,
My Name
Thanks
Please help me to review my cover letter if it has any grammar mistakes.===
Dear Mr. xxxxxx,
I am interested in applying for the position of Network Administrator at xxxxx, which was posted in June 23th in your company’s Web site. The opportunity presented in this listing is very appealing, and I believe that my experience and education will make me a competitive candidate for this position.
I have been working as a network and server administrator from 2004 to 2008. I worked as a Network Administrator in Ministry of Health. I assisted the IT Department in setting-up, maintaining, and troubleshooting the local network. I have excellent knowledge of network devices and services like DNS, DHCP, VPN and IIS. I have the ability to monitor the network traffic using SNMP and provide security to both LANs and WANs.
I graduated from the College of Telecom and Information with a high GPA (4.9 out of 5.0). Moreover, I have CCNA, MCSE, and ICDL certificates which help me to improve my skills in networking and make me feel confident in my job.
Please refer to the accompanying résumé to provide you with further details of my qualifications, in consideration for this position. I would enjoy being a part of your company. Please call me at (xxx) xxx-xxxx to arrange an interview at your convenience.
Sincerely,
My Name
Thanks
Top answer
Hi Griffin: Here are some suggestions. It is better to be succinct, so I have struck out words that I felt did not add anything. I am interested in applying for the position of Network Administrator at xxxxx (you don't need to repeat the company's name.
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Hi Griffin:
Here are some suggestions. It is better to be succinct, so I have struck out words that I felt did not add anything.
I am interested in applying for the position of Network Administrator at xxxxx (you don't need to repeat the company's name. They know what it is. If the posting has a reference number, you can put that above the salutation), which was posted
Here are some suggestions. It is better to be succinct, so I have struck out words that I felt did not add anything.
I am interested in applying for the position of Network Administrator at xxxxx (you don't need to repeat the company's name. They know what it is. If the posting has a reference number, you can put that above the salutation), which was posted
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