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I copy parts of the writing I need help with as follows: 1.Sport is very important for young people. Everybody should practise some sport, it is very essential. If you practise sport you will have a healthy life. 2. Practising a sport is very easy, and you only need to feel like it. 3.Firstly, for me, the best is mountain-biking. Mountain-biking is a sport suitable for people of all ages who enjoy being outdoors. 4. In my school there are football and basketball competitions. My friends and I were champions of the basketball competition. 5. Finally, I think you should practise sports, it is the best thing that you can do. Just do it! Take up a sport! More questions are as below:
A. You should practice some sport. B. Do we say: They are fanatics of football? C. I was stressed like you, but I'm not anymore.

Shi Aina · Accepted Answer

Hi Chiachen,
I corrected and reworded your paragraph as seen below:

Sports are very important for young people. It is essential for everybody to learn some kind of sport, as playing sports can help you lead a healthy life( or can help improve your quality of life). It's easy to learn a sport, as long as you choose one that you enjoy. Personally, my favorite sport is mountain-biking. Mountain-biking is a sport that is suitable for people of all ages who enjoy being outdoors. In my school there are also football and basketball competitions. My friends and I were basketball champions in the recent competition.
Finally, I would encourage you to take up a sport because it would be the best decision you could make.
Just do it!

I don't really understand your last questions:

chiachenMore questions are as below:A. You should practice some sport. B. Do we say: They are fanatics of football? C. I was stressed like you, but I'm not anymore.

Do you want the grammar in the above sentences to be corrected?

Chiachen · Answer

Thank you. I guess I should know the answers for questions A, B and C. You kind of answerd the A.
A. You should learn some kind of sport. You should play some sports. Is it OK: Play some sport?
B. They are football fanatics. Or: They are fanatic about football.
C. I was stressed as you? but not anymore. I was stressed like you were but not anymore.
Also, Regarding the sentence: He is famous as world's home run king. He earned total of 868 home runs during his periods as an active player of NPB. Is periods a proper word here? Is it better to replace it by seasons or career?

P.S. The spell check on my PC went missing(disasterous), I better find out how to get it back soon. There could be tons of mispellings here.

Shi Aina · Answer

Hi Chiachen,

A. You should learn some kind of sport. You should play some sports. Is it OK: Play some sport?
It is probably better to say You should learn some kind of sport. It doesn't sound grammatically correct to say ''play some sport.''

B. They are football fanatics. Or: They are fanatic about football.
Both are fine.

C. I was stressed as you? but not anymore. I was stressed like you were but not anymore.
If you want to write it the first way, you need to write ''I was as stressed as you but not anymore.'' Otherwise both are fine.

He is famed as world's home run king. He earned a total of 868 home runs during his periods as an active player of NPB(do you mean MLB, Major league Baseball?). Is periods a proper word here? Is it better to replace it by seasons or career?
It seems best to use the word ''career.''

Hope this is helpful. Feel free to ask anymore questions.

Chiachen · Answer

Thank you again. So you have no problem with the word earned, instead of hit.

Chiachen · Answer

Also, He is famous as the world's home run king. Do we need the here?

Shi Aina · Answer

I don't know if in sports vocabulary you would say earned or hit home runs. But yes, you do need a the for ''the world's home run king.''

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