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Believer Posted 20 years ago
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00Thank you for having interest in Believers School located in ZZZ, Nowhere. I am going to list a few things that you might find interesting about our school.02br
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00Our school has:02br
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001) Great vista offering great serene nuances to students who want to take their minds off or to immerse in studying,02br
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002) Cordial adminstrative staff willing to lend helping hands anytime and anywhere,02br
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003) Fully qualified faculty members with long teaching experiences,02br
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004) Delicious and varied menus for lunches in Cafeteria where the foods are prepared with great care,02br
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005) Fully furnished individual rooms for students who want to take advantage of,02br
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006) Well-structured school curriculum to ready our students for prestigeous universities and colleges02br
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00So, don't worry about your sons and daughters and trust us to take care of your precious ones. Believers School will help them to fulfill their dreams. 0-
  

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0I've kept to your words as much as possible. )02br 02br 00Thank you for your interest in Believer's School (or "The Believer School") located in ZZZ, Nowhere. 02br 02br 002) A cordial adminstrative staff willing to lend a helping hand anytime and anywhere.

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0I've kept to your words as much as possible. (I'm not addressing the logic here - I'm sure you know a scenic vista should not be the first thing you list when trying to sell someone on a school, much less that the vista would take their minds off their studies.)02br
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00Thank you for your interest in Believer's School (or "The Believer School") located in ZZZ, Nowhere. Be
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0Thank you for correcting mine. Thank you for lending a helping hand05000.02br
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00One more question02br
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00Why did you include the articles in all the sentences or phrases?02br
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00Our school has:02br
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00A great vista offering ...02br
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00A cordial administrative staff ...
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