Luka330 Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please, correct my writing
Report on The New Café
Introduction
The purpose of this report is to assess why the students do not use the existing café and to recommend some suggestions for the students and the college.
Close In Times
The café closes at 6:00pm. However, there are students whose classes end up 9:00 pm and therefore, many of them cannot eat or drink anything.
Changing The Menu
The café offers the same menu every day. Nevertheless, the needs of the students are so varied that it cannot keep to their expectations.
Uncomfortable Furniture
The chairs are really uncomfortable because they are so small and therefore, sit on it is being difficult for the students.
Entertainment
Moreover, the café is a really boring place which the students have never enjoyed being in it.
Recommendations
To conclude, the new student café needs to expand its opening hours until the lessons finish. On the other hand, the chairs have to change for others much bigger than it has now and offers different dishes in the menu. Nevertheless, it would be a good idea if it has a special room with video games for those students who feel stressed.
Introduction
The purpose of this report is to assess why the students do not use the existing café and to recommend some suggestions for the students and the college.
Close In Times
The café closes at 6:00pm. However, there are students whose classes end up 9:00 pm and therefore, many of them cannot eat or drink anything.
Changing The Menu
The café offers the same menu every day. Nevertheless, the needs of the students are so varied that it cannot keep to their expectations.
Uncomfortable Furniture
The chairs are really uncomfortable because they are so small and therefore, sit on it is being difficult for the students.
Entertainment
Moreover, the café is a really boring place which the students have never enjoyed being in it.
Recommendations
To conclude, the new student café needs to expand its opening hours until the lessons finish. On the other hand, the chairs have to change for others much bigger than it has now and offers different dishes in the menu. Nevertheless, it would be a good idea if it has a special room with video games for those students who feel stressed.
Top answer
"On the other hand" indicates that you will mention something that is contrary to what you just said. "Nevertheless" indicates that something exists despite something else. You have used these words incorrectly in your paper.
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"On the other hand" indicates that you will mention something that is contrary to what you just said. "Nevertheless" indicates that something exists despite something else. You have used these words incorrectly in your paper.
I'm going to correct your errors because it would be very tedious to point out your mistakes for you to correct, though I would prefer to do that for you.
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I'm going to correct your errors because it would be very tedious to point out your mistakes for you to correct, though I would prefer to do that for you.
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