SpoonfedBaby Posted 21 years ago
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Please correct my translation: Live 8
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00 I translated a news article about a Live 8 concert. Please, help me to correct it. 02 br
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00 The only African concert did not attract the crowd 00 About 8000 people went to 00 for the concert Live 8 organized in the eve of the G8 in 01 02 00 and asked a cancellation of the debt of African countries and a doubling of aid to the continent. In spite of the small interest, the only African concert can be proud of having received a 00 distinguished (important) guest: 00 Nelson Mandella. 02 br
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00 “Tata, Tata!”, scanted the crowd at the apparition on the 00 stage, in 00 downtown , of the fragile figure of the most well-known grandfather of the world, Nelson Mandela. 00 00 “I said I retrieved from public life, I should not be here”, 00 joked 00 Nelson Mandela before sending a call to the G8 leaders who are meeting this week in 01 02 00 . “You have the opportunity to stop a crime against the humanity”, said he to them. “Overcome poverty is not an act of charity, it is a justice. Where there is poverty, there is no freedom,” added he. 02 br
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00 Thank you very much, 02 br
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00 I translated a news article about a Live 8 concert. Please, help me to correct it. 02 br
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00 The only African concert did not attract the crowd 00 About 8000 people went to 00 for the concert Live 8 organized in the eve of the G8 in 01 02 00 and asked a cancellation of the debt of African countries and a doubling of aid to the continent. In spite of the small interest, the only African concert can be proud of having received a 00 distinguished (important) guest: 00 Nelson Mandella. 02 br
00 From our 00 correspondent of 01 i 02 i 02 br
00 “Tata, Tata!”, scanted the crowd at the apparition on the 00 stage, in 00 downtown , of the fragile figure of the most well-known grandfather of the world, Nelson Mandela. 00 00 “I said I retrieved from public life, I should not be here”, 00 joked 00 Nelson Mandela before sending a call to the G8 leaders who are meeting this week in 01 02 00 . “You have the opportunity to stop a crime against the humanity”, said he to them. “Overcome poverty is not an act of charity, it is a justice. Where there is poverty, there is no freedom,” added he. 02 br
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00 Thank you very much, 02 br
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00 Spoonfedbaby 02 br
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0 The only African concert did not attract a crowd 02 br 02 br 00 About 8000 people went to Johannesburg for the Live 8 concert organized for the eve of the G8 conference in Scotland, asking for the cancellation of the debt of African countries and a doubling of aid to the continent. 00 00 “I said I retired from public life; I should not be here”, 00 joked 00 Mandela, before sending a call to the G8 leaders who are meeting this week in Scotland. “You have the opportunity to stop a crime against humanity”, he said to them.
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00 About 8000 people went to Johannesburg for the Live 8 concert organized for the eve of the G8 conference in Scotland, asking for the cancellation of the debt of African countries and a doubling of aid to the continent. In spite of the lack of interest, the only African concert can be proud of having rec
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00 About 8000 people went to Johannesburg for the Live 8 concert organized for the eve of the G8 conference in Scotland, asking for the cancellation of the debt of African countries and a doubling of aid to the continent. In spite of the lack of interest, the only African concert can be proud of having rec
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0 ...the Live 8 concert organized 00 for the eve of 00 the G8 conference in Scotland 02 br
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00 Hi Mister Micawber, does it suggest something else from the phrase 'on the eve of ' 02 br
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00 Hi Mister Micawber, does it suggest something else from the phrase 'on the eve of ' 02 br
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0 Yes. The concert was not 'organized' on the eve, but 'held' on the eve; it was organized some time before, 'for' (performance on) the eve. 02 br
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0 00 Thanks to Mister Micawber and K.O. for your helps. 02 br
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00 About 8000 people went to Johannesburg for the Live 8 concert held on the eve of the G8 conference in Scotland, asking for the cancellation of the debt of African countries and a d
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00 The only African concert did not attract a crowd 02 br
00 About 8000 people went to Johannesburg for the Live 8 concert held on the eve of the G8 conference in Scotland, asking for the cancellation of the debt of African countries and a d
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0 On second thought, the commas in the second paragraph after 'appearance' and after 'Johannesburg' should be deleted: they are unnecessary and they slow down the reading of the text. Also, delete the lacy ending of 'Scotlandlace'. 02 br
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00 Otherwise, it looks fine, SFB. 02 br
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00 Otherwise, it looks fine, SFB. 02 br
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