Up Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
Please correct my text below:
The story of an eraser and a pencil.
Pencil: I'm sorry.
Eraser: What's that for, dear? You didn't do anything wrong, did you?
Pencil: Oh yes I did, you've suffered a pain only because of me. Whenever I make a mistake, you are always with me to help me correct it. But when you do that, you hurt yourself. Every time like that, you are smaller and weaker.
Eraser: That's right! But honey, never mind! You know, I was created to do this. I was created to help you whenever you make mistakes. Though I know I will disappear someday and you will have another mother, I'm still happy with what I did for you. Thus, don't worry, dear! I don't like seeing you when you're sad.
Pencil: I'm sorry.
Eraser: What's that for, dear? You didn't do anything wrong, did you?
Pencil: Oh yes I did, you've suffered a pain only because of me. Whenever I make a mistake, you are always with me to help me correct it. But when you do that, you hurt yourself. Every time like that, you are smaller and weaker.
Eraser: That's right! But honey, never mind! You know, I was created to do this. I was created to help you whenever you make mistakes. Though I know I will disappear someday and you will have another mother, I'm still happy with what I did for you. Thus, don't worry, dear! I don't like seeing you when you're sad.
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Very clever. And I see no major mistakes. Here are some suggestions, however.
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Very clever. And I see no major mistakes. Here are some suggestions, however.
you've suffereda pain (much pain, many pains)
Every time like that (each time, every time)
whatI did I've done for you
[ I'm not sure the "mother"-concept works. Perhaps 'partner'? ]
you've suffered
what
[ I'm not sure the "mother"-concept works. Perhaps 'partner'? ]
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Yoong LiatHi up,Please do not post twice.Yes, I know that. I waited but no one replied. The deadline is coming and I can't wait for so long.
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