Nik Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
please, correct my essay.
The woman says that she was disappointed when she heard that news that a new baseball field. She thinks that there are so many other things the school could’ve done with that land, like building theater, or music hall, a fine arts building. She has nothing against sports, but they have already a baseball field.
She also says that school puts a big priority on sports, so the sports teams do well. If school developed their drama and music and fine arts programs, the school could broaden its appeal and gain a good reputation in those areas, too.
She also says that school puts a big priority on sports, so the sports teams do well. If school developed their drama and music and fine arts programs, the school could broaden its appeal and gain a good reputation in those areas, too.
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I have underlined some problem areas. Please try to correct them and then post your revised essay here. The woman says that she was disappointed when she heard that news that a new baseball field.
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I have underlined some problem areas. Please try to correct them and then post your revised essay here.
The woman says that she was disappointed when she heard that news that a new baseball field. She thinks that there are so many other things the school could’ve done with that land, like building theater, or music hall, a fine arts building. She has nothing ag
The woman says that she was disappointed when she heard that news that a new baseball field. She thinks that there are so many other things the school could’ve done with that land, like building theater, or music hall, a fine arts building. She has nothing ag
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