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Hi teachers,Can you correct this letter please? It is really important for me.To the attention to Carl Williams, Course Coordinator.I am very interested in the four weeks course. I need additional information, like, the time of the course, paperwork I must do to take the four weeks course, etcWaiting for your quick responseYours sincerelyThanks in advance

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

Can you correct this letter please? It is really important for me.

To the attention to Carl Williams, Course Coordinator.

I am very interested in the four weeks course.

I need additional information, like, the time of the course, paperwork I must do to take the four weeks course, etc

Waiting for your quick response <<<< This sounds very peremptory to me.

Yours sincerely

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Dear Mr. Williams,

I am very interested in the four week course.

I would be grateful for additional information, including the course time and any required paperwork.

Thank you for your assistance.

Yours sincerely,

Clive

Tenacious Learner · Answer

Thank you very much for your commentaries and help Clive.

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