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London Children’s Film Festival                                                            by XYZLondon Nov.21: London Children’s Film Festival began at the Leads Entertainment Centre here today. The festival is seen as one of the most popular film festivals in the world, which recognizes the filming talent in children. The festival saw a grand opening as the Prime Minister XYZ inaugurated it amidst thunderous applause from the audience which predominantly comprised children. Around 120 films made by children aged between 12 and 16 are to be screened at the festival, which will conclude on the 29th November. “The Walk with the Murderer” a poignant tale of a poor woman, made by George Samena of Westminster and “Candlelight Dinner” a story based on hardships faced by old people made by Thomas Jenniks of Hampsted, are said to be the most sought after films in the list. Besides screening of the movies, the festival is to provide quite a number of interesting and useful opportunities to children to learn the latest techniques of film making. The festival also provides opportunities to children to take part in workshops which focus on their physical, psychological, emotional and intellectual growth. Hopink Carol, a young film maker at the festival, said “The festival promises to be simply enlightening.” Samola Gomes mother of Becky 12, said, “It is a great opportunity for the children to meet and share their creative talent in film making and other fields.” Organizers are planning to invite entries from twelve more countries for the festival next year, and India has reason to be happy about it this as it is one among the twelve.

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London Children’s Film Festival
by XYZ

London Nov.21: London Children’s Film Festival began at the Leads Entertainment Centre here today. The festival is seen as one of the most popular film festivals in the world, which recognizes the filming talent in children. The festival saw a grand opening as the Prime Minister XYZ inaugurated it amidst thunderous applause from the audience which predominantly comprised children.

Around 120 films made by children ~~aged between~~ 12 and 16 are to be screened at the festival, which will conclude on the 29th November. “The Walk with the Murderer” a poignant tale of a poor woman, made by George Samena of Westminster and “Candlelight Dinner” a story based on hardships faced by old people made by Thomas Jenniks of Hampsted, are said to be the most sought after films in the list. Besides screening of the movies, the festival is to provide quite a number of interesting and useful opportunities to children to learn the latest techniques of film making. The festival also provides opportunities to children to take part in workshops which focus on their physical, psychological, emotional and intellectual growth.

Hopink Carol, a young film maker at the festival, said “The festival promises to be simply enlightening.” Samola Gomes mother of Becky 12, said, “It is a great opportunity for the children to meet and share their creative talent in film making and other fields.”

Organizers are planning to invite entries from twelve more countries for the festival next year, and India has reason to be happy about it this as it is one among the twelve.

Vsuresh · Answer

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London Children’s Film Festival
by XYZ

London Nov.21: London Children’s Film Festival began at the Leads Entertainment Centre here today. The festival is seen as one of the most popular film festivals in the world, which recognizes the filming talent in children. The festival saw a grand opening as the Prime Minister XYZ inaugurated it amidst thunderous applause from the audience which predominantly comprised children.

Around 120 films made by children between the ages 12 and 16 are to be screened at the festival, which will conclude on the 29th of November. “The Walk with the Murderer” a poignant tale of a poor woman, made by George Samena of Westminster, and “Candlelight Dinner”, a story based on hardships faced by old people, made by Thomas Jenniks of Hampsted, are said to be the most sought after films in the list. Besides screening of the movies, the festival is to provide quite a lot of interesting and useful opportunities for children to learn the latest techniques of film-making. The festival also provides opportunities for children to take part in workshops which focus on their physical, psychological, emotional and intellectual growth.

Hopink Carol, a young filmmaker at the festival, said, “The festival promises to be simply enlightening.” Samola Gomes, mother of Becky, aged 12, said, “It is a great opportunity for the children to meet and share their creative talent in film-making and other fields.”

Organizers are planning to invite entries from twelve more countries for the festival next year, and India has reason to be happy about it as it is one among the twelve.

Mister Micawber · Answer

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London Children’s Film Festival
by XYZ

London Nov.21: London Children’s Film Festival began at the Leeds (?) Entertainment Centre here today. The festival is seen as one of the most popular film festivals in the world, which recognizes the filming talent in children. The festival saw a grand opening as Prime Minister XYZ inaugurated it amidst thunderous applause from an audience mostly of children.

Around 120 films made by children 12 to 16 are to be screened at the festival, which will conclude on November 29th.“The Walk with the Murderer”, a poignant tale of a poor woman, made by George Samena of Westminster, and “Candlelight Dinner”, a story based on hardships faced by old people, made by Thomas Jenniks of Hampsted, are said to be the most sought after films in the list. Besides screening of the movies, the festival is to provide interesting and useful opportunities for children to learn the latest techniques of film-making. The festival also provides opportunities for children to take part in workshops which focus on their physical, psychological, emotional and intellectual growth.

Hopink Carol, a young filmmaker at the festival, said, “The festival promises to be simply enlightening.” Samola Gomes, mother of Becky, 12, said, “It is a great opportunity for the children to meet and share their creative talent in film-making and other fields.”

Organizers are planning to invite entries from twelve more countries for the festival next year, and India has reason to be happy, as it is one among the twelve.

Vsuresh · Answer

Thank you very much,sir.

Vsuresh · Answer

Sir
I have a question:
Can you tell me why we use comma after happy here?

Organizers are planning to invite entries from twelve more countries for the festival next year, and India has reason to be happy, as it is one among the twelve.

Mister Micawber · Answer

vsureshCan you tell me why we use comma after happy here?

Clarity of structure. Compare:

...and India has reason to be happy as a clam.

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