Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
Grammar
paragraph checking
Hi Can someone please check, whether is this paragraph incomplete. Thanks.
Bossman is an Indonesian who owns a company in Kuala Lumpur. A large but disorganized company. Bossman shambles his company's management by his ridiculous behaviors and principle, such as, "Bossman is always right!". Bearing his absurdity is his secretary, Diana, who has to juggle and attend to every ridiculous and impossible need of the Bossman. Diana’s daily confrontation with her boss puts her patience and good sense to the test.
Bossman is an Indonesian who owns a company in Kuala Lumpur. A large but disorganized company. Bossman shambles his company's management by his ridiculous behaviors and principle, such as, "Bossman is always right!". Bearing his absurdity is his secretary, Diana, who has to juggle and attend to every ridiculous and impossible need of the Bossman. Diana’s daily confrontation with her boss puts her patience and good sense to the test.
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Some of this is acceptable as informal conversation. However, I would make a couples of changes to make it completely correct. Bossman is an Indonesian who owns a company in Kuala Lumpur.
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Some of this is acceptable as informal conversation. However, I would make a couples of changes to make it completely correct.
Bossman is an Indonesian who owns a company in Kuala Lumpur. It is a large but disorganized company. Bossman makes shambles of his company's management by his ridiculous behaviors and such principles such as "Bossman
Bossman is an Indonesian who owns a company in Kuala Lumpur. It is a large but disorganized company. Bossman makes shambles of his company's management by his ridiculous behaviors and such principles
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How about this short description?
When an Indonesian businessman called Bossman expands his company to Kuala Lumpur, he brings his ridiculous, yet hilarious, company disarray with it. Who is to blame though? The Bossman himself!
When an Indonesian businessman called Bossman expands his company to Kuala Lumpur, he brings his ridiculous, yet hilarious, company disarray with it. Who is to blame though? The Bossman himself!
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