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What is wrong with the underlined portions of this paragraph..

My name is Christina White. I am a Licensed Practical Nurse and I work at the Moncton Hospital. I have been with the hospital for the past eight years. I am currently taking upgrading through correspondence with the New Brunswick Community College in Moncton, NB. I am taking the following courses: English 122, Chemistry 112 and Math 112. The reason I am taking these courses is so I can apply to enter the RN program at UNB, Moncton; my goal is to be enrolled, in the RN program, by the fall of 2011. I have so many friends, who are RN’s, who keep telling to me to go for it. I hope I can do it! “I will do it!” But I can’t help but keep asking myself, can I really do this? If I am unable to complete these courses, it will be heart-breaking. Well it’s getting late ~~after 3am in the morning~~I’m heading to bed. Night all, sweet dreams!

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Hi Anon , Every one of the underlined areas has an improper use of the comma. So I encourage you to read this resource on how to use commas.
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/607/1/

It is good to get a "feel" for commas. To do this, read the passage out loud as if you were speaking it to a friend. Wherever you naturally make a small pause, then consider this as a place for a comma. If you read straight through, then likely no comma is needed.

My name is Christina White. I am a Licensed Practical Nurse and (punctuation) I work at the Moncton Hospital. I have been with the hospital for the past eight years. I am currently taking upgrading through correspondence with the New Brunswick Community College in Moncton, NB. I am taking the following courses: English 122, Chemistry 112 and Math 112. The reason I am taking these courses is so I can apply to enter the RN program at UNB, Moncton; my goal is to be enrolled, (punctuation)in the RN program, (punctuation)by the fall of 2011. I have so many friends, (punctuation)who are RN’s, (punctuation) who keep telling to me to go for it. I hope I can do it! “(punctuation)I will do it!”(punctuation) But I can’t help but keep asking myself, can I really do this? If I am unable to complete these courses, it will be heart-breaking. Well it’s getting late.(punctuation) ~~after 3am in the morning~~I’m heading to bed. Night all, sweet dreams!

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