Anonymous Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing
New Salary Offer
Please review or correct the following paragraphs as the bargaining points in my demand letter ...
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" Subject: New Salary Offer
Dear Max:
With reference to the subject above, I'm declining to accept the salary offer until a review of my current responsibilities and salary/renumeration are formally negotiated and agreed. I'm very positive about my job and the organization. However, I would like to discuss how to increase my contribution, and the salary and other benefits I deserve from the company.
I know it's a very difficult decision on my part to make, however, considering the present economic situation and the cost of living here in (location ommitted), the current gross salary now I'm receiving monthly is no longer enough to sustain the basic needs of my growing kids, excluding their education, medical and health insurance expenses. For example, foods, clothing, house rental, car gasoline, school tuition fees and other grocery items are very expensive nowadays.
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The rests of my letter are about some highlights of my accomplishments to be considered. My only concern is how I will start my letter in a nice wordings.... Thank you for your help.
--------------------------------------------- portion of my letter ----------------------------
" Subject: New Salary Offer
Dear Max:
With reference to the subject above, I'm declining to accept the salary offer until a review of my current responsibilities and salary/renumeration are formally negotiated and agreed. I'm very positive about my job and the organization. However, I would like to discuss how to increase my contribution, and the salary and other benefits I deserve from the company.
I know it's a very difficult decision on my part to make, however, considering the present economic situation and the cost of living here in (location ommitted), the current gross salary now I'm receiving monthly is no longer enough to sustain the basic needs of my growing kids, excluding their education, medical and health insurance expenses. For example, foods, clothing, house rental, car gasoline, school tuition fees and other grocery items are very expensive nowadays.
... "
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The rests of my letter are about some highlights of my accomplishments to be considered. My only concern is how I will start my letter in a nice wordings.... Thank you for your help.
Top answer
--- Try this ---- " Subject: New Salary Offer Dear Max: It was a pleasure to receive a new salary offer in connection to the renewal of my service contract with the company. However, with much thought, I'm declining to accept this new offer until a review of my current responsibilities and salary/renumeration are formally negotiated and agreed. I'm very positive about my job and the organization.
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--- Try this ----
" Subject: New Salary Offer
Dear Max:
It was a pleasure to receive a new salary offer in connection to the renewal of my service contract with the company. However, with much thought, I'm declining to accept this new offer until a review of my current responsibilities and salary/renumeration are formally negotiated and agreed. I'm very positive abou
" Subject: New Salary Offer
Dear Max:
It was a pleasure to receive a new salary offer in connection to the renewal of my service contract with the company. However, with much thought, I'm declining to accept this new offer until a review of my current responsibilities and salary/renumeration are formally negotiated and agreed. I'm very positive abou
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"Dear Max:
Thank you for the expression of faith by formally extending a new salary offer in connection to the renewal of my service contract with the company. However, with much thought, I'm declining to accept it until review of my current responsibilities and salary/renumeration are well negotiated and agreed. I'm positive about my job and the organization. Therefore, I would like
Thank you for the expression of faith by formally extending a new salary offer in connection to the renewal of my service contract with the company. However, with much thought, I'm declining to accept it until review of my current responsibilities and salary/renumeration are well negotiated and agreed. I'm positive about my job and the organization. Therefore, I would like
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