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Guest Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Need help editing my personal letter, please!!!

hello,

Please help me edit this letter please, I am going to put it on my web site.
thank you,
Plai-or

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May 23, 2005

Hello,

My name is Plai-or Aroonrat, if you don’t know how to pronounce my name you can pronounce it like tools “prior”. I was born in Thailand 1965, and I am 40 years old now. I think I old enough to share some of my experience in the past, my opinion about our world in nowadays, and some of my visions in the future of this world.

I am not trying to be an expert in any area of my topic articles, they are only my experience in the past and my opinion. I am going to write them because I need to make myself useful for others before I die from this world and never have a chance to talk about it.

I am not a lazy person since I was kid till now, I have a Mathematic degree from the university, but I don’t have any career right now because something in my mind bothering me. You will know what is it from my articles, and I hope it will give you some knowledge and ideas for living your life.

Regards,
Plai-or Aroonrat
“This world belongs to you”
  

Top answer

0 Plai-or, 02br 02br 00It's a good introductory letter. I've posted my suggested edit for grammatical errors trying not to edit content too much. In some instances I have changed the order of words to make more sense to a native English speaker.

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00It's a good introductory letter. I've posted my suggested edit for grammatical errors trying not to edit content too much. In some instances I have changed the order of words to make more sense to a native English speaker. 02br
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00'Hello, 02br
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00My name is Plai-or Aroonrat. If you don't know how to pronou
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0 Hi Dear 02br
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00Firstly Very Very thanks to that lady who wanted to share her feelings with others. 02br
00Keep it up.Second i am always thankful to the people who try to help others . 02br
00As far as we are concerned here to do some ammendment so i will also try to participate in that though i am not a native English Speaker this is my 3rd lang
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0 Fasi, 02br
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00That's a good rewrite with slightly different interpretation to mine, however there are a few grammar errors. I think you're opening line is incorrect though, the writer doesn't want to actually be called 'prior,' it's included to demonstrate how to pronounce Plai-or. Your version should read as follows: 02br
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00Hello ,
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0 Dear rwiles, 02br
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00Sorry for that mat, my intentions were not to pointing out the incorrections or corrections which you made. Might be the the way i adopted it was wrong sorry for that.Anyways thank you for correcting my gramattical errors. 02br
00You were telling that i tried to rewrite something so it is not like that. Infact i wanted to change only
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0 May I ask what is the difference between "you will know" and "you will come to know"? 0-
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0 Yes you can ask. 02br
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00" you will come to know " is more formal than " you will know " this is what i think. 02br
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00It would be my pleasure if someone find it wrong and make it correct 02br
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00Thanks. 02br
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