Thien Tan Chuong Posted 16 years ago
Grammar
Need help correct my short sentence
I have a grief introduction about myself as below,
Born and raised in Ho Chi Minh city, Vietnam. From my childhood, I was attracted to a comic story which is called Doreamon, a cat robot supports his master to pass over difficulties, I loved drawing different robot shapes on paper and create some comic story by myself with title "Heroes and Alien Monsters". I dreamed of one day, I would design and create an intelligent robot in human form in the future.
Time changes all; since I entered a Computing course at London Metropolitan University, I have not only collected techniques and skills from my modules such as Networking, Database Administrator, Java Programming, etc; I am also learning new skills from my self-study. During my study, I have a great interest in website designing and developing where my creative initiative, ideas will encourage me to keep up with my career
Please, help me check my writing and let me what I should fix.
I am appreciated for your help
Born and raised in Ho Chi Minh city, Vietnam. From my childhood, I was attracted to a comic story which is called Doreamon, a cat robot supports his master to pass over difficulties, I loved drawing different robot shapes on paper and create some comic story by myself with title "Heroes and Alien Monsters". I dreamed of one day, I would design and create an intelligent robot in human form in the future.
Time changes all; since I entered a Computing course at London Metropolitan University, I have not only collected techniques and skills from my modules such as Networking, Database Administrator, Java Programming, etc; I am also learning new skills from my self-study. During my study, I have a great interest in website designing and developing where my creative initiative, ideas will encourage me to keep up with my career
Please, help me check my writing and let me what I should fix.
I am appreciated for your help
Top answer
Here is how I would improve your writings. I tried to make minimal changes but I had to guess what you wanted to say in some cases. Boldface are my additions, crossouts are my deletions of your original text.
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Here is how I would improve your writings. I tried to make minimal changes but I had to guess what you wanted to say in some cases. Boldface are my additions, crossouts are my deletions of your original text.
I was born and raised in Ho Chi Minh City, Vietnam. DuringFrom my childhood, I was attracted to a comic story, which is called Dorea
I was born and raised in Ho Chi Minh City, Vietnam. During
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