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0I am still working over the copy for web site of the software development company. I composed two more paragraphs, which will briefly describe the software, sold by the company. These paragraphs will go to the start page. If you have something to say on style, grammar and attractiveness of the text, please leave your comments, thank you in advance.02br02br01font00Company X Property Manager02font02br02br01font00Company X Property Manager is a time-proved software for real estate brokers, agents, and anybody who is involved in property rentals business. It automates property listings and simplifies property management process. Company X Property Manager takes care of inquiries, payments, reservations, photos and other property rentals information. Due to its intuitively understandable and user-friendly interface, Company X Property Manager doesn’t require that you have strong computer knowledge.02font02br02br01font01font00Company X02font00 Auto Manager02font02br02br01font00Company X Auto Manager is a one-stop software for showcasing vehicle listings. With it, you can create, publish and manage vehicle information, such as make, model, stock number, VIN, mileage, etc. using only your browser. Company X Auto Manager automates inquiries, reservations, payments and car presentation process, enabling you to focus on efficient marketing of car rental services online. Company X Auto Manager is a perfect match for your “rent-a-car” business.  02font0-

Philip · Accepted Answer

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01cite10Kedra12cite10I am still working over the copy for web site of the software development company. I composed two more paragraphs, which will briefly describe the software, sold by the company. These paragraphs will go to the start page. If you have something to say on style, grammar and attractiveness of the text, please leave your comments, thank you in advance.12br
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11font10Company X Property Manager is a time-prove11b11font10n12font12b10 software for real estate brokers, agents, and anybody who is involved in property rentals business 11b11font10either drop business, or change it to "involved in the business of property rentals" (Three nouns in a row makes it a little 'heavy', I think.12font12b10. It automates property listings and simplifies11b11font10 the12font12b10 property management process. Company X Property Manager takes care of inquiries, payments, reservations, photos and other property rentals information. Due to its intuitively understandable and user-friendly interface, Company X Property Manager doesn’t require that you have strong computer knowledge.12font12br
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11font11font10Company X12font10 Auto Manager12font12br
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11font10Company X Auto Manager is a one-stop software for showcasing vehicle listings. With it, you can create, publish and manage vehicle information, such as make, model, stock number, VIN, mileage, etc.11b11font10,12font12b10 using only your browser. Company X Auto Manager automates inquiries, reservations, payments and car presentation process, enabling you to focus on efficient marketing of car rental services online. Company X Auto Manager is a perfect match for your “rent-a-car” business. 12font12br
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11b01font00Some would question the use of "you", but I have no better suggestion.02font02b00 0-

Kedra · Answer

0I appreciate your help, thank you. 050010id1

Anonymous · Answer

0Also, I would say either "the car presentation process" or "the process of car presentation"0-

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