My shadow

That's a good one Maj. Maybe it requires one more line as the ending seems abrupt.

Yeah, I know. Can you help me? I just couldn't come up with anything else.

Maybe you could add... after the last line...

In the middle of the night
when all I have is a lonely soul

Thanks.

I am going to love you more than anyone
In the middle of the night
look inside of me.

Lurking in the darks, Patience and love their only arms, His hands were two bandits, Waiting with restless hearts, For a moon coloured treasure, To be paid as ransom.
(May I be pardoned, I didn't mean to be voyeur.)

very nice one...i like it so muchh
go on

You scared my heart off
In the middle of the night
when I dreamt my future bright
You embraced me with ****
In the middle of the night
when all I could see was the dusk in your mind
It never felt so good to have you in the dark
In the middle of the night
when all I have is a lonely soul
I am going to love you more than anyone
In the middle

Hllo maj,

Then it should be 'your hands were two bandits',and I think if you put the 'lurking...' after the third line, then it makes sense. One more thing, you have to pay the ransom, moon coulered treasure is yours. Cheers