Moguwai007 Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
My diary
This is my today's diary.
Could you please improve on my English in order to make it natural?
It's the first time my kid rode a skateboard willingly .
I just kept watching how he would try to be on the board.
He sat on it and started to kick the ground with his both feet just like a frog.
He was so clumsy that he fell off the board again and again.
In spite of may falls, he would never stop trying to get back on it,and he kept moving forward.
I thought that's how he would take his life.
Life is full of challenges. He will be the kind of a person who will take the challenges.
That really made me be proud of my son.
Could you please improve on my English in order to make it natural?
It's the first time my kid rode a skateboard willingly .
I just kept watching how he would try to be on the board.
He sat on it and started to kick the ground with his both feet just like a frog.
He was so clumsy that he fell off the board again and again.
In spite of may falls, he would never stop trying to get back on it,and he kept moving forward.
I thought that's how he would take his life.
Life is full of challenges. He will be the kind of a person who will take the challenges.
That really made me be proud of my son.
Top answer
moguwai007 It's the first time my kid rode a skateboard willingly. I just kept watching how he would try to do it. He sat on it and started to kick the ground with both feet, just like a frog.
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moguwai007It's the first time my kid rode a skateboard willingly. I just kept watching how he would try to do it. He sat on it and started to kick the ground with both feet, just like a frog. He was so clumsy that he fell off the board again and again. In spite of many falls, he never stopped trying to get back on it, and he kept moving forward. I thought,
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My personal take is that there were issues with managing the tenses and framing of the sentences. So I will offer my spin on this:
It was the first time my kid rode a skateboard willingly.
It was the first time my kid rode a skateboard willingly.
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