Bensou Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Motivation letter
0 Hello, 02 br
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00 I would like some help about my motivation letter. Could anybody give me some suggestion or correct it? Thank you for your help 02 br
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00 Dear Sir or Madame, 02 br
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00 Are you seeking for a responsible part-time secretary providing professional and competent assistance to one of your Managers thanks of her sense of organization abilities and perfect computer literacy (Word, Excel, Lotus Notes, Internet, E-mail and Power Point (basic knowledge)) as well as all administration tasks? I although possess a good commercial background and communication skills in German (mother tongue), English and French. My exactness, punctuality and motivation have always been appreciated. 02 br
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00 From *** until *** I worked for *** as a part-time secretary and I am currently looking for a new surrounding. 02 br
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00 For the last 21/2 years I worked for *** I assumed many administrative tasks like following-up the personnel files, correspondence in German, French and English, reservation of accommodations and plane tickets, hold petty cash etc. 02 br
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00 The enclosed curriculum vitae and references will provide you more information about my personality und I would be glad to answer any questions you may have. 02 br
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00 I sincerely hope that you will consider me for any vacancies, which might occur, within your organization. 02 br
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00 Therefore, I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. 02 br
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00 Sincerely yours, 0-
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00 I would like some help about my motivation letter. Could anybody give me some suggestion or correct it? Thank you for your help 02 br
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00 Dear Sir or Madame, 02 br
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00 Are you seeking for a responsible part-time secretary providing professional and competent assistance to one of your Managers thanks of her sense of organization abilities and perfect computer literacy (Word, Excel, Lotus Notes, Internet, E-mail and Power Point (basic knowledge)) as well as all administration tasks? I although possess a good commercial background and communication skills in German (mother tongue), English and French. My exactness, punctuality and motivation have always been appreciated. 02 br
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00 From *** until *** I worked for *** as a part-time secretary and I am currently looking for a new surrounding. 02 br
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00 For the last 21/2 years I worked for *** I assumed many administrative tasks like following-up the personnel files, correspondence in German, French and English, reservation of accommodations and plane tickets, hold petty cash etc. 02 br
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00 The enclosed curriculum vitae and references will provide you more information about my personality und I would be glad to answer any questions you may have. 02 br
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00 I sincerely hope that you will consider me for any vacancies, which might occur, within your organization. 02 br
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00 Therefore, I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. 02 br
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00 Sincerely yours, 0-
Top answer
0 Hello Bensou, and welcome to English Forums. The following words and phrases need repair: 02 br 02 br 00 providing 02 br 00 thanks of 02 br 00 organization 02 br 00 perfect -- this is a good word, but unbelievable; choose another 02 br 00 although 02 br 00 a new surrounding -- should be plural, but is not a point to be put forward in a motivation letter anyway. 02 br 00 21/2 02 br 00 following-up 02 br 00 hold -- this is a verb; the other items in your list are nouns (or are trying to be) 02 br 00 und -- oops!
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0 Hello Bensou, and welcome to English Forums. The following words and phrases need repair: 02 br
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00 providing 02 br
00 thanks of 02 br
00 organization 02 br
00 perfect -- this is a good word, but unbelievable; choose another 02 br
00 although 02 br
00 a new surrounding -- should be plural, but is not a point to be put forw
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00 providing 02 br
00 thanks of 02 br
00 organization 02 br
00 perfect -- this is a good word, but unbelievable; choose another 02 br
00 although 02 br
00 a new surrounding -- should be plural, but is not a point to be put forw
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0 Thank for you backfeed. I mad some changes. Does it sound better now? 02 br
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00 Are you seeking for a responsible part-time secretary to provide professional and competent assistance to one of your Managers thanks to her sense of organization abilities and excellent computer literacy (Word, Excel, Lotus Notes, Internet, E-mail and Power Point (basic knowledge)) as well as
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00 Are you seeking for a responsible part-time secretary to provide professional and competent assistance to one of your Managers thanks to her sense of organization abilities and excellent computer literacy (Word, Excel, Lotus Notes, Internet, E-mail and Power Point (basic knowledge)) as well as
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0 Much, much better. 02 br
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00 I don't really like the awkward structure of that long first sentence, and I suggest that you separate it into at least two different clauses: 02 br
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00 '... 01 b 00 managers; one who has good organizational abilities 02 b 00 ...' 02 br
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00 'Seek' = 'look for', so omit the
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00 I don't really like the awkward structure of that long first sentence, and I suggest that you separate it into at least two different clauses: 02 br
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00 '... 01 b 00 managers; one who has good organizational abilities 02 b 00 ...' 02 br
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00 'Seek' = 'look for', so omit the
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0 Hi, 02 br
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00 Thank you very much for your input. 02 br
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00 It's a longtime I didn't write any letters in english. 02 br
00 I really hope to find something where I can use the language. I have the impression I am loosing everthing I learned. 02 br
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00 by 02 br
00 bensou 0-
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00 Thank you very much for your input. 02 br
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00 It's a longtime I didn't write any letters in english. 02 br
00 I really hope to find something where I can use the language. I have the impression I am loosing everthing I learned. 02 br
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00 by 02 br
00 bensou 0-
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