Letter to Editor correction

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Dear Editor,

I’m writing in regard to the article published last Tuesday about children’s spare time. I parcially agree with what was written in the article, but I believe that technology can’t be blamed for the lifestyle of youngsters, there are various factors that should be taken into account.

Technology is used everyday in one’s routine; television is being watched while having breakfast, phonecalls to acquaintances are made, information is searched on the Internet, etc. That’s why one shouldn’t be surprised when it comes to children spending their free time with videogamesor surfing through the Internet.

It’s the parent’s responsibility to keep an eye on what their children do, not only because of their health but also because of their safety. Spending too much time in front of the television or computer is unhealthy, the body needs regularly exercise or one will be a victim of a sedentary lifestyle. Besides, in this stage of life making friends is very importantsince it will define the personality of the child, this will be desencouraged if they stay too long at home, without socializing. In addition, the Internet should be treated with carfullness, it’s such a wide and unknown world with so many dangers, especially for children. Nevertheless, if there is control over the time spent on it there shouldn’t be any problems.

In conslusion, parents should responsible for the life of their children. If they have a timetable with balanced activities, they will most probably enjoy it. Parents can, if they wish, sign the infants up in a sports club, like this they do not only do sports which is healthy, but they also make friends.

Yours sincerely

Gloria