Bee teal 22 Posted 6 years ago
Grammar

Is this written correctly?

We will build your pool with our team of devoted employees who are dedicated to building your pool in a timely manner with superior workmanship.

  

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bee teal 22 We will build your pool with our team of devoted employees who are dedicated to building your pool in a timely manner with superior workmanship. Here's my take: The repetition (underlined) is what spoils your pitch. Try to substitute something else for the second instance, like 'completing the project'.

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bee teal 22

We will build your pool with our team of devoted employees who are dedicated to building your pool in a timely manner with superior workmanship.

Here's my take:

The repetition (underlined) is what spoils your pitch. Try to substitute something else for the second instance, like 'completing the project'.

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