Vbblueeyes Posted 22 years ago
Is this in iambic pentameter?
If ever two were so stubborn, then surely we.
If ever a man were caring of a child, then thee.
If ever a father were without contest,
Compare with me, ye daughters, for he is the best.
I prize our time together more than chests of gold,
Or all the sand that bunkers doth hold.
Nor doth any boy ever know,
A father’s protection in eye of daughter’s woe.
Thy love for me is unlike any other.
Unlike boyfriend, husband, brother
So when another may come to be so dear,
Do not worry Father, for this I make clear.
Thee were my protection from the start,
That’s why in my life, thee will always be a part.
If ever a man were caring of a child, then thee.
If ever a father were without contest,
Compare with me, ye daughters, for he is the best.
I prize our time together more than chests of gold,
Or all the sand that bunkers doth hold.
Nor doth any boy ever know,
A father’s protection in eye of daughter’s woe.
Thy love for me is unlike any other.
Unlike boyfriend, husband, brother
So when another may come to be so dear,
Do not worry Father, for this I make clear.
Thee were my protection from the start,
That’s why in my life, thee will always be a part.
Top answer
Hello Vb It isn't a regular passage of iambic pentameters, as these lines have 6 feet: 2, 4, 5, 14. These have 4 feet: 6, 10, 13. This line seems to have 3 feet: 7.
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Hello Vb
It isn't a regular passage of iambic pentameters, as these lines have 6 feet: 2, 4, 5, 14. These have 4 feet: 6, 10, 13. This line seems to have 3 feet: 7.
An iambic pentameter should have 5 feet, with a predominance of the iambic foot, which is an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable. Other stress patterns within each foot may be used, to a certain ext
It isn't a regular passage of iambic pentameters, as these lines have 6 feet: 2, 4, 5, 14. These have 4 feet: 6, 10, 13. This line seems to have 3 feet: 7.
An iambic pentameter should have 5 feet, with a predominance of the iambic foot, which is an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable. Other stress patterns within each foot may be used, to a certain ext
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thank you very much
it is my poem that is meant to emulate Anne Bradstreet and it definately needed help
thanks again
it is my poem that is meant to emulate Anne Bradstreet and it definately needed help
thanks again
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Hello vb (for some reason your screen name makes me think of a Visual Basic constant),
It's quite a difficult task, and you haven't done badly at all. I'll point out some of the places where the meaning needs attention (comments in square brackets):
If ever two were so stubborn [not the right adjective for your meaning], then surely we.
If ever a man were caring of
It's quite a difficult task, and you haven't done badly at all. I'll point out some of the places where the meaning needs attention (comments in square brackets):
If ever two were so stubborn [not the right adjective for your meaning], then surely we.
If ever a man were caring of
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Here it is, i hope this is better, still dont think its in iambic pentameter but thats another issue all together, thanks so much for your help, it is very much appreciated.
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Hello vb
That's much closer to iambic pentameter! In line 10, you could say 'or a brother' to get the extra syllable. Some lines still have 6 feet; did you want help with changing them to 5?
What sense did you want for 'stubborn'? Maybe we can find a word.
For line 2, to keep the rhyme, you could simply imitate Bradstreet:
'If ever man were loved by child,
That's much closer to iambic pentameter! In line 10, you could say 'or a brother' to get the extra syllable. Some lines still have 6 feet; did you want help with changing them to 5?
What sense did you want for 'stubborn'? Maybe we can find a word.
For line 2, to keep the rhyme, you could simply imitate Bradstreet:
'If ever man were loved by child,
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help changing them to five would nbe much appreciated
i think i know which lines your talking about and i was having difficulty finding something that fit
i changed "cars" to "gems"
for stubborn it was kinda like the apple doesnt fall far from the tree kinda thing
both me and my dad are really opinionated and argue about everything
thanks again
vb
i think i know which lines your talking about and i was having difficulty finding something that fit
i changed "cars" to "gems"
for stubborn it was kinda like the apple doesnt fall far from the tree kinda thing
both me and my dad are really opinionated and argue about everything
thanks again
vb
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Hello vb
To get it closer to iambic pentameter, you could for instance amend as follows:
*If ever two were stubborn, then surely we.
If ever man were loved by child, then thee...
I prize our time together more than rings...
*So loving a father in eye of daughter’s woe...
Unlike a lover, husband, or a brother...
*Worry not Father,
To get it closer to iambic pentameter, you could for instance amend as follows:
*If ever two were stubborn, then surely we.
If ever man were loved by child, then thee...
I prize our time together more than rings...
*So loving a father in eye of daughter’s woe...
Unlike a lover, husband, or a brother...
*Worry not Father,
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Hows this:
To My Dear and Loving Father
If ever two were stubborn, then surely we.
If ever man were loved by a child, then thee.
If ever father were the very best,
Compare with me, ye daughters, dare contest.
*Trade not your love to fly on angel’s wings,
Or all that man can get in earthly things.
Sadly, no boy shall ever come to know,
So loving a
To My Dear and Loving Father
If ever two were stubborn, then surely we.
If ever man were loved by a child, then thee.
If ever father were the very best,
Compare with me, ye daughters, dare contest.
*Trade not your love to fly on angel’s wings,
Or all that man can get in earthly things.
Sadly, no boy shall ever come to know,
So loving a
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