Is this CV clear and attractive enough for applying a degree?

Dear all,
Would you please check the following CV for applying a degree in
Industrial Engineering in France?
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Resume

GOAL
To pursue a Master of Engineering ( Diplôme d’Ingénieur) in *** at University of ***

PERSONAL INFORMATION
Full Name:
D.O.B: Birth Place: China
Gender: Female Citizenship: P.R.China
Telephone: Email:

EDUCATION , AWARDS AND ACTIVITIES IN CAMPUS:

l Experience
09/1999~06/2003: Bachelor of Engineering (awarded in 06/2003)
*** University of Science & Technology
Major: Automation
09/1996~06/1999: *** school of *** City

l Awards & Honors
09/2002 Third Prize of Scholarship for the term (09/2001~06/2002)
10/2000 Excellent Students’ Cadre
10/1999 Fellowship for Outstanding Students in Freshman Drill

l Extracurricular Activities
09/2001--09/2002 President of the Propagand Department at the Student Union in the Department of Automation.

l Part Time Job Experience
07/2002~04/2003 Internship in *** Co., Ltd. working as Production Management & Coordination Assistant of *** products.
08/2001~05/2002 Worked as part-time Sales Representative for *** Cosmetic Company
08/2000~03/2001 Worked part-timely in *** Salon for its advertising

WORK EXPERIENCE AND ACHIEVENMENT

l Experience
07/2003~Present *** Color Display System Ltd. (Monitor Research and
Development Center for LG Electronics)
Occupation: Global Account Management

l Job Description
This position is to be performing as the window of the company to communicate and with the valuable customers for OEM products (OEM-original Equipment Manufacturer) while coordinate and management with other domestic and oversea departments to:
1) Planning and schedule the new projects, while managing and cooperating with other departments to keep the schedule.
2) Recording and managing monthly production quantity to match the production order
3) Organizing related departments to solve quality issues happened in production or after sales.

l Projects Achievement
1) *** 17” FCDT CRT 71KHZ ; 17” FCDT CRT 85KHZ (with speakers)
2) *** 17” FCDT CRT 71 HZ
3) *** 17” FCDT CRT 71 HZ
4) *** 17” FCDT CRT 85KHZ ; 19” LCD
(*** are the name of American Brands we produce the products for)

l Awarded Training and Education
1) Special oversea training were offered, due to my hard work and outstanding performance
A) 10/2003~11/2004 Training in South Korean for GEM Biz.
B) 8/2004~9/2004 HPI ( High Potential Individual) Training in South Korean

2) Six Sigma method education and passed the internal examination, ranking 2nd in 67
Six Sigma is the most popular method utilized in production area to keeping improving production quality and speed. Also it applied in all problems solving process and business process.

LANGUAGES
l English: Excellent in reading, writing, speaking and listening.
TOEFL: Total: *** (TWE: ***) (05/2002); BEC (Vantage): *** (11/2003)
07/2003---Present Use English daily working with foreign customers and colleagues.
10/2002---Present Tour Guide for guests of native speakers of English in my city.

l French: under taking 550-hour course in *** Institution.

COMPUTER SKILLS
Language: C/C++, VB
Application: MTLAP, Auto CAD, PROTEL 99, Office, Photoshop, and firework,

INTERESTS
Chinese Traditional calligraphy & Paining, International Standard Dance, Swimming, Tour, Writing, Cooking
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I don't know if it's too wordy or boring for a professor to read it or
if it is attractive enough for me to get the admission.

Thanks a lot

Rosmeary
Dec. 7th, 2004