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Could you please help me correct these sentences?

1 For all intents and purposes, it was a personal, unsecured loan. no papers were drawn up. not a trace of the transaction. we did the deal on a handshake

2 Put as much milk as you can without it overflowing.

3 Why couldn't you have had nicer eyes?

4 The house is too set back from the road.

5 She's always places where she's not welcome.

6 We don't care about people as it is, once we have a child, we won't care even more.

7 He loves to be dominated in a relationship.

8 He never gets mad for the right reasons.

Thank you

Chalkbrd · Accepted Answer

Wow, that's an odd collection of sentences.

alc241 For all intents and purposes, it was a personal, unsecured loan. no papers were drawn up. not a trace of the transaction. we did the deal on a handshake [Here is how I would say it: For all intents and purposes, it was a personal, unsecured loan. No papers were drawn up, and there wasn't any paperwork for the transaction. We did the deal on only a handshake.]

2 Put as much milk as you can without it overflowing. [I'd say: Put in as much milk as you can without it spilling over.]

3 Why couldn't you have had nicer eyes? [This sentence is fine grammatically, but it's quite an insult. Do you intend for it to sound mean?]

4 The house is too set back from the road. [I'd say: The house is set too far back from the road.]

5 She's always places where she's not welcome. [I'd say: She's always somewhere that she's not wanted. I suppose grammtically it should really be "she's always somewhere where she's not wanted" but having the two "wheres" together sounds odd.]

6 We don't care about people as it is, once we have a child, we won't care even more. [I'd make this two sentences like this: We don't care about people as it is. Once we have a child, we won't care even more. Again, this sounds kind of heartless. Is that really how you want it to come across?]

7 He loves to be dominated in a relationship. [This is how I would say it.]

8 He never gets mad for the right reasons. [This sounds fine. I might say the converse, though (depending on the situation]: He always gets mad for the wrong reasons.]

Those are my suggestions.

Chalk

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