Majed Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing
I need some one to review this letter please?
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00 This is a job applacation letter. The job is assisstance of human resource departement 02 br
00 " Nationalization". In the beginging I send Mona, the contact person, a letter in arabic but she insisted to write to her in english and this is the letter; 02 br
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00 18/3/2006 02 br
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00 Dear Mona, 02 br
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00 Thank you for your response which I appreciate very much. I got I sense from you that you would like to test my English, so I would tell that I have no problem writing in English at all because I’m a western educated person. The only thing that made me writes in Arabic because you are an Arab and Arabic as a language is the language of people heaven, may allah accept us among them, so why would we talk to each other in English? But if you insist, it’s ok with me. Not to mention that I’m a member of World Arab Translators Association (WATA) so you should have nothing to worry about. 02 br
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00 Any way, as I mentioned in my Arabic written letter that I’m interested in a vacant job that is in you agency which is assistance of human resource department “nationalization”. As I mentioned earlier that although that I lack the practical experience in the working field but I very very well educated in term of world different methodologies and school of thoughts due to my political background as you know. 02 br
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00 I also spent such long time in 00 the number 1 educational destination in the 01 00 United States 02 00 , where I had the opportunity to have very good view of 01 02 00 educational system. As I told you earlier that I didn’t have the chance to get the best degree, but that doesn’t mean that I didn’t have the chance to get to know the best schools, teachers and students in the US how they look like. The point that I trying to tell you that I know what I good graduate looks like because I know what a good school and professors looks like. I think this quality I gained is due to my searching at that time to find the best colleges and universities and I could bit on 1 million dollar in the quality that I gained if any body in the U.A.E could beat me on it. 02 br
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00 Finally, I’d like to assure you once again that the only thing that kept me a way from getting the proper gob is that I never found an employer how would understand my full potential. I wish my dream employer is you and wish this is the chance of my life I this job is the gob of my dream. I also assure you that with a little help from you and an experienced fellow in work, I would full fill the gap of experience that I lack. 02 br
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00 Sincerely yours, 02 br
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00 This is a job applacation letter. The job is assisstance of human resource departement 02 br
00 " Nationalization". In the beginging I send Mona, the contact person, a letter in arabic but she insisted to write to her in english and this is the letter; 02 br
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00 18/3/2006 02 br
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00 Dear Mona, 02 br
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00 Thank you for your response which I appreciate very much. I got I sense from you that you would like to test my English, so I would tell that I have no problem writing in English at all because I’m a western educated person. The only thing that made me writes in Arabic because you are an Arab and Arabic as a language is the language of people heaven, may allah accept us among them, so why would we talk to each other in English? But if you insist, it’s ok with me. Not to mention that I’m a member of World Arab Translators Association (WATA) so you should have nothing to worry about. 02 br
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00 Any way, as I mentioned in my Arabic written letter that I’m interested in a vacant job that is in you agency which is assistance of human resource department “nationalization”. As I mentioned earlier that although that I lack the practical experience in the working field but I very very well educated in term of world different methodologies and school of thoughts due to my political background as you know. 02 br
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00 I also spent such long time in 00 the number 1 educational destination in the 01 00 United States 02 00 , where I had the opportunity to have very good view of 01 02 00 educational system. As I told you earlier that I didn’t have the chance to get the best degree, but that doesn’t mean that I didn’t have the chance to get to know the best schools, teachers and students in the US how they look like. The point that I trying to tell you that I know what I good graduate looks like because I know what a good school and professors looks like. I think this quality I gained is due to my searching at that time to find the best colleges and universities and I could bit on 1 million dollar in the quality that I gained if any body in the U.A.E could beat me on it. 02 br
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00 Finally, I’d like to assure you once again that the only thing that kept me a way from getting the proper gob is that I never found an employer how would understand my full potential. I wish my dream employer is you and wish this is the chance of my life I this job is the gob of my dream. I also assure you that with a little help from you and an experienced fellow in work, I would full fill the gap of experience that I lack. 02 br
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00 Sincerely yours, 02 br
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02 br 02 br 00 I would personally cut all the stuff commenting on the Arabic letter as it sounds as though you are complaining a bit. In the first paragraph I would keep the first two sentences and cut the rest, but also mention your membership of the WATA somewhere. ' 0-
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0 Hi there, as it is important for your employer to see your true level of English proficiency I am reluctant to give you much help in detail but here's a couple of points for you 02 br
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00 Spelling in the first sentence of final paragraph - job not gob! 02 br
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00 I would personally cut all the stuff commenting on the Arabic letter as it sounds as though
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00 Spelling in the first sentence of final paragraph - job not gob! 02 br
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00 I would personally cut all the stuff commenting on the Arabic letter as it sounds as though
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0 In all honesty, I do not think you should send this letter as there are quite some errors and confusions. Let me rephrase some things for you and see how it can help you. 02 br
00 I also left some things out. 02 br
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00 Dear Mona, 02 br
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00 Thank you for your 01 b 00 much appreciated response 02 b 00 .The only thing that made me
00 I also left some things out. 02 br
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00 Dear Mona, 02 br
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00 Thank you for your 01 b 00 much appreciated response 02 b 00 .The only thing that made me
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0 Thanks mates fo your kindness and please check the letter after some editing , 02 br
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00 Dear Mona, 02 br
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00 Thank you for your 01 b 00 much appreciated response 02 b 00 . Let me point out at the beginning of this letter that I chose to write in Arabic in view that we are both Arabs and I apologize if this turned out to
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00 Dear Mona, 02 br
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00 Thank you for your 01 b 00 much appreciated response 02 b 00 . Let me point out at the beginning of this letter that I chose to write in Arabic in view that we are both Arabs and I apologize if this turned out to
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