Missmeteor Posted 21 years ago
Letter Writing
I need some help with my letter of motivation too
0 Please give me advice about ma letter of motivation 02 br
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00 here it is : 02 br
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00 Personal details 02 br
00 First name 02 br
00 Last name 02 br
00 Address 02 br
00 Tel/fax : 02 br
00 e-mail : 02 br
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00 Subject: Inscription in Master d' Architecture 02 br
00 (My city), (date) 02 br
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00 Dear Mister Director of registration, 02 br
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00 After a French baccalaureat STT, I directed myself towards architecture, my passion, and I obtained my diploma of the first cycle of the studies of architecture, the DEFA. 02 br
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00 This basic training enabled me to acquire a good knowledge of architecture and the manner of designing the buildings in a french way. 02 br
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00 My African origins had already allowed me to attend the construction of traditional houses. 02 br
00 I would like now, while studying in a Canadian university, to widen my knowledge with North-American architecture and more precisely with the Canadian architecture which is different from that of France on many points. 02 br
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00 At the time of my passage to "Pacific Gateway International College of Toronto" I had the honor to see me awarded as an " exceptional student". 02 br
00 I obtained the TOEFL as I passed to Toronto (Canada). 02 br
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00 I think of having the necessary level to carry out a second cycle of studies in Canada and the portfolio attached should support my request favorably. 02 br
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00 My final ambition is to return to work in my country of origin and for this reason I would like to be able to bind in a harmonious way the richness of indigenous traditional construction to the audacity of American architecture. 02 br
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00 I thus have the honor, Mister the Director of registration, to request my inscription in Master of Architecture. 02 br
00 Hoping sincerely that this request will be accepted I remain 02 br
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00 sincerely yours 02 br
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00 ( my Signature) 02 br
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00 Enclosure: CV, copy of diplomas etc... 02 br
00 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 02 br
00 Thank you so much for your help and this site. 0-
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00 here it is : 02 br
02 br
00 Personal details 02 br
00 First name 02 br
00 Last name 02 br
00 Address 02 br
00 Tel/fax : 02 br
00 e-mail : 02 br
02 br
00 Subject: Inscription in Master d' Architecture 02 br
00 (My city), (date) 02 br
02 br
00 Dear Mister Director of registration, 02 br
02 br
00 After a French baccalaureat STT, I directed myself towards architecture, my passion, and I obtained my diploma of the first cycle of the studies of architecture, the DEFA. 02 br
02 br
00 This basic training enabled me to acquire a good knowledge of architecture and the manner of designing the buildings in a french way. 02 br
02 br
00 My African origins had already allowed me to attend the construction of traditional houses. 02 br
00 I would like now, while studying in a Canadian university, to widen my knowledge with North-American architecture and more precisely with the Canadian architecture which is different from that of France on many points. 02 br
02 br
00 At the time of my passage to "Pacific Gateway International College of Toronto" I had the honor to see me awarded as an " exceptional student". 02 br
00 I obtained the TOEFL as I passed to Toronto (Canada). 02 br
02 br
00 I think of having the necessary level to carry out a second cycle of studies in Canada and the portfolio attached should support my request favorably. 02 br
02 br
00 My final ambition is to return to work in my country of origin and for this reason I would like to be able to bind in a harmonious way the richness of indigenous traditional construction to the audacity of American architecture. 02 br
02 br
00 I thus have the honor, Mister the Director of registration, to request my inscription in Master of Architecture. 02 br
00 Hoping sincerely that this request will be accepted I remain 02 br
02 br
00 sincerely yours 02 br
02 br
00 ( my Signature) 02 br
02 br
02 br
00 Enclosure: CV, copy of diplomas etc... 02 br
00 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 02 br
00 Thank you so much for your help and this site. 0-
Top answer
0 Hello, 02 br 02 br 00 Nice and brief and to the point, well done, but I think you need to clarify one thing in particular. 02 br 02 br 00 You speak of a wish to return to your country of origin - is this France or another country (you mention being of African origin but this could just mean of African descent, not necessarily that you personally come from Africa). In any case, Africa is a huge continent and it wouldn't hurt to be more precise.
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0 Hello, 02 br
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00 Nice and brief and to the point, well done, but I think you need to clarify one thing in particular. 02 br
02 br
00 You speak of a wish to return to your country of origin - is this France or another country (you mention being of African origin but this could just mean of African descent, not necessarily that you personally come from Af
02 br
00 Nice and brief and to the point, well done, but I think you need to clarify one thing in particular. 02 br
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00 You speak of a wish to return to your country of origin - is this France or another country (you mention being of African origin but this could just mean of African descent, not necessarily that you personally come from Af
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0 Oh yes!!Thank you!! I didn't notice that I wasn't precise enough about my return, indeed I was talking about working in Africa. 02 br
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00 about the director, i don't know if it's about a man or a woman, I just had an adress where to send my application form, i think it's an office of inscription. 02 br
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00 What can I say instead?? Maybe I should j
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00 about the director, i don't know if it's about a man or a woman, I just had an adress where to send my application form, i think it's an office of inscription. 02 br
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00 What can I say instead?? Maybe I should j
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