Samsoner2 Posted 12 years ago
Business & Finance
How can I re-write this for a cover letter?
This sentence is from my second paragraph in the cover letter, immediately after I briefly mention my responsibilities as a web editor.
Which version of the sentence is the best and how can I re-write it?
"I learned quickly on the job, consistently met deadlines and prioritized my tasks, which helped the web team to eventually re-launch KHLT's website."
"By consistently meeting deadlines and prioritizing tasks, my contribution as a web editor led to the eventual re-launch of KHLT's website."
"As a result of consistently meeting deadlines and prioritizing tasks, my efforts led to the eventual re-launch of KHLT's website"
Which version of the sentence is the best and how can I re-write it?
"I learned quickly on the job, consistently met deadlines and prioritized my tasks, which helped the web team to eventually re-launch KHLT's website."
"By consistently meeting deadlines and prioritizing tasks, my contribution as a web editor led to the eventual re-launch of KHLT's website."
"As a result of consistently meeting deadlines and prioritizing tasks, my efforts led to the eventual re-launch of KHLT's website"
Top answer
#2 and #3 both have dangling clauses. I learned quickly on the job, prioritized my tasks, and consistently met deadlines, contributing to the web team's re-launch of KHLT's website.
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#2 and #3 both have dangling clauses.
I learned quickly on the job, prioritized my tasks, and consistently met deadlines, contributing to the web team's re-launch of KHLT's website.
I learned quickly on the job, prioritized my tasks, and consistently met deadlines, contributing to the web team's re-launch of KHLT's website.
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Thank you Mister Micawber!
I played around with the sentence more and decided to shorten it, since "learning quickly on the job" is not as important as multitasking or meeting deadlines.
I prioritized my tasks and consistently met deadlines, which contributed to the web team's re-launch of KHLT's website.
I played around with the sentence more and decided to shorten it, since "learning quickly on the job" is not as important as multitasking or meeting deadlines.
I prioritized my tasks and consistently met deadlines, which contributed to the web team's re-launch of KHLT's website.
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