Piplot Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
Hi. Could check my grammar and help me to improve my skills on it?
This is a text I did.
Nek.
He was born in 1974 in Italy and he spent his chillhood in a village, Fiorentina. After school, he studied music and he learnt to play different sort of instruments and to compose songs. He was brilliant.
He had to move to Napole and record exquisite melodies that everyone could find in each song of that disc. He got a lot of prizes for that album, but he didn't reach the fame. So he had to learn spanish, when he did so, he recorded CDs in two languages and finally became a famous singer because he sold millions of CDs in Mexico. This 2013 he has released one CD that is at the top ten of the best songs in Italy.
Thanks in advance.
I hope your answers.
Nek.
He was born in 1974 in Italy and he spent his chillhood in a village, Fiorentina. After school, he studied music and he learnt to play different sort of instruments and to compose songs. He was brilliant.
He had to move to Napole and record exquisite melodies that everyone could find in each song of that disc. He got a lot of prizes for that album, but he didn't reach the fame. So he had to learn spanish, when he did so, he recorded CDs in two languages and finally became a famous singer because he sold millions of CDs in Mexico. This 2013 he has released one CD that is at the top ten of the best songs in Italy.
Thanks in advance.
I hope your answers.
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I have underlined some problems and struck out useless verbiage: He was born in 1974 in Italy and he spent his chillhood in the village of Fiorentina. After school, he studied music and he learnt to play different sort of instruments and to compose songs. He was brilliant.
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I have underlined some problems and struck out useless verbiage:
He was born in 1974 in Italy and he spent his chillhood in the village of Fiorentina. After school, he studied music and he learnt to playdifferent sort of instruments and to compose songs. He was brilliant.
He had to move to Napole and record exquisite melodiesth
He was born in 1974 in Italy and he spent his chillhood in the village of Fiorentina. After school, he studied music and he learnt to play
He had to move to Napole and record exquisite melodies
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