Help on University motivational letter (feedback)

Dear all,

I wrote my motivational letter for the university. I would like to get advices and criticism on it. I´m looking forward to it.

Thanks in advanced.

Dear Sirs, Madams,

After a long orientation of different master tracks I was happy when I encountered the program business information systems. I visited the masterday in 2014. This year I came to see if changes had been made to the program. Currently I am graduating, and I will complete the study information engineering on Windesheim University of applied sciences in June.

Throughout the years I developed a strong interest in how organizations organize their systems, so that it meets the objectives of the organization and fits within the culture of the organization. Furthermore I became very interested in analyzing and modeling underlying processes, projects that comply with the function of process-architect.

At the moment I am doing my graduation internship on the subject data management. In this research I analyze how the organization gathers data that leads to several systems and determine if there are quality issues that may affect results within the future business intelligence environment.

My goal is to become a IT professional that has the competence of analyzing the information needs of an organization, mastered the required theory and is able to apply it. The information engineering study gave me the opportunity to learn the theory and grow in applying by completing several internships. After seeing the business information systems program I spoke with several persons who completed the program. I am convinced that this program fits within my ambition and is the most logical master to apply after the information engineering study. The business information systems program will provide me the knowledge and insights to elevate and develop my career potentials in the field of information management. The program contains courses as business IT alignment and business process management that suits within the field of my ambition. As a person I am very ambitious and determined to make the most of the opportunity to attend this program.

Once again I am grateful for considering my application and I look forward to a favorable reply.

Sincerely,

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