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Babyblue_girl08 Posted 18 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

help me this paragraph please!

help me to check my grammar and verb tense please.


I also had experienced like her too. When my first day in United States my family and I lived at for two months. While we live on that place my grand uncle who lives in called us and invited us to move in his place. It took two or three weeks my mom decided to move in . When my mom plans to go, she told to my grand auntie that we all going to move nest week. My grand auntie heard that she mad at us and she didn’t talk to us for three days. Finally the day is came and we all packed all our stuff to ready for our new life in the new place. On that day we woke up so early and I’m glad that my grand auntie took us to the bus terminal. She was nice and care for us. I know she mad at us because she don’t want us to leave her alone. She bought some snacks for us to eat when we on the bus. In the bus had lots people and most of them is the elders. I felt tired when traveling because it took eight hours sitting on the bus; it made me bored and tired. When we arrived in my family and I live at my grand uncle the one who called my mom to move here. We at his house for two months and we moved again. I really hate moving because it tired to move to one place and to another place that terrible. But now I’m glad that my mom doesn’t have attention to move again. When I hear the world “Move” I felt tired and hate it. When moving you needs to buy new things for your new house and need to decorate and clean them. You also need to make new friends and neighborhood too. I think that situation is hard for young people like me because we need to deal with our new life and the things around us. If mom asks me to move to another place I would say no to her. I love the place I lived right now and I know someday I will move again.
  

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The web site mangled my last post!!! I try again.

I also had experiences like hers ( must be possessive case of the pronoun "she", not the adjective, her) too. When During my first days in United States myfamily and I lived in at San Diego (we live in a city, county; we live at
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thank you

AlpheccaStars!!! you really help me a lot.