Help me please with this letter of credentials.

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00Could you kindly please look at my reference and correct all mistakes I made in it? Maybe you could give me any idea to improve this letter? (Personally, I don’t like the first paragraph). Besides, I am not sure about the right title of my referee. He is a veterinarian specialized in equine diseases. Do you think it's OK like I wrote or should be different? Where I should put the abbreviation of his degree – right after his last name or in the line below like I did? Thank you very much for your help.02br
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00M.V.Sc, Equine Veterinary Specialist02br
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00‘Horse Center’02br
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00Tel: +11 222 333 44402br
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00January 24, 2007 02br
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00Dear Ms. LastName:02br
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00This serves as a letter of reference for Miss Maria LastName. I have known Maria since June 2000 when she came to the Horse Center which I own, and asked me for the opportunity to conduct research on sport horses for her Master Degree thesis. In the summer of 2005 she volunteered to work at our facility. 02br
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00Maria is an accomplished horsewoman, a highly talented horse caregiver, well experienced in starting and training young stock. During her voluntary work she was responsible for routine checks as to horse health and overall well-being, administrating daily and post-operative treatments in prescribed manner, as well as providing the first aid in minor injuries and reporting any significant problems immediately to supervisors. Furthermore, she applied the basic care to our horses including feeding, grooming, exercising animals, and stalls maintenance as well.02br
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00Maria also assisted in diagnostic treatments such as routine hematological tests and external parasite control. She was collecting blood samples and other diagnostic specimens as well. Under veterinary supervision she injected animals with different drugs and inoculated them. Maria conducted all veterinary procedures, following given instructions, accurately, with excellent care and responsibility. Moreover she accomplished assigned tasks without ongoing supervision, presented commitment and enthusiasm for new duties, and was willing to assume increased responsibility. 02br
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00Maria possesses thorough understanding of the horse anatomy and physiology, as well as extended knowledge and practical skills required for handling, breaking and schooling young horses. Also, she has excellent ability to evaluate situations and act appropriately. She is friendly, polite and well mannered individual with high respect for animals. She was ready to help wherever she was needed, worked very hard and adapted exceptionally well to our work conditions. I appreciated having her on my team.02br
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00If you have any further questions regarding Maria’s ability, please do not hesitate to contact me using the information on this letterhead. 02br
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00Sincerely,02br
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