Essay : male versus female intelligence. Does gender matter ?

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Hi,I try to write an essay about intelligence. Can you please correct my mistakes ? Thanks a lot.Here is my introductionIn my opinion, the gender doesn't  matter when we talk about intelligence. In the following paragraph, I  will show that the biological differences between men and women are  not a factor of intelligence differences. Then I will take some  exemples of women well-know for their work in mathematics or physics.  Finally, I will relativize the concept of intelligence.And my first paragraphAccording to most of the studies, men  and women do not have the same brain characteristics. For example,  men's brain are about 10 % bigger than women's brain. Yet,  in some  regions of the women's brain  are neurons more densely packed. But  does the size actually matter ? Definitely not. Thus, if a difference  exists, it's not for a biological reason.Thanks !

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

I have underlined some problem areas and stricken out unnecessary verbiage:

In my opinion, ~~the~~ gender doesn't matter when we talk about intelligence. ~~In the following paragraph~~, I will show that the biological differences between men and women are not a factor of intelligence differences. Then I will take some exemples of women well-know for their work in mathematics or physics. Finally, I will relativize the concept of intelligence.

According to most ~~of the~~ studies, men and women do not have the same brain characteristics. ~~For example,~~ men's brain are about 10% bigger than women's ~~brain~~. Yet, in some regions of the women's brain are neurons more densely packed. ~~But does the size actually matter? Definitely not~~. Thus, if a difference exists, it's not for a biological reason. (This last sentence is illogical: you have just provided a biological difference.)

Anonymous · Answer

Dear, please find my comment on your introduction :

In my opinion, the gender doesn't matter when we talk about intelligence.

"In the following paragraph, I will show that the biological differences between men and women are not a factor of intelligence differences. " I cannot see the relevance of this statement to your begin statement. If biological difference cannot explain the gender intelligence difference, maybe other matters could !?

"Then I will take some exemples of women well-know for their work in mathematics or physics." : you cannot prove anything by examples; almost to any rule or law (certainly in the human sciences), there are exceptions; the exceptions do not prove that a law does not work, they just prove that there are exceptions. Socio-biological studies about gender difference in intelligence do not indicate that there are no intelligent women; they just indicate that there are many times less highly intelligent women then men (over IQ 145 up to 8 times less women than men, and this for IQ tests which are normalised at IQ 100 for men and women).

" Finally, I will relativize the concept of intelligence." Well, the thesis and the importance of the thesis are always two different things; a thesis, an intellectual position can be right or wrong, and you can argue, but the importance that somebody attaches to a position, has nothing to do with the right or wrong of that position; if you write something about the gender differences (or non-differences) than the argumentation of the relevance does not add to the validity of the thesis. By the way, if you think that the concept of intelligence should be relativized, why then write about it ??

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