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X.mehrdad Posted 21 years ago

Eighth Platform

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00Down on your porch, 02br
00At the break of day, 02br
00Idle and indolent, I lay 02br
00My head hanging loose down the rise 02br
00A hazy moon is waving in my eyes 02br
00There, in Cassandra like presence of narcissi 02br
00The painter’s pallets are the whores in ecstasy 02br
00And on a pond somewhere nearby 02br
00A water lily vanishes in agony 02br
00I hear the percussion of your sole 02br
00 The April breeze plays on the strings of my soul 02br
00The waning night is brimming over with your perfume 02br
00And the fireflies are dancing in delirium 02br
00The percussion stops 02br
00You touch my burning lips 02br
00And, I sip you dry, through your fingertips 02br
00Then, the mute conversation of the eyes 02br
00And my ignominy for all my lies 02br
00The warmth of your lips on my eyelid 02br
00And your soft whisper in my ear 02br
00‘Lily is dead and the pond is dry 02br
00It’s time to fly, butterfly’ 02br
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00 Eighth Platform 02br
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00I believe in a prophet who lives in south station 02br
00He never believes in love or salvation 02br
00He preaches the anti word of a prodigal god, 02br
00Who bottled off on the seventh night 02br
00 Heading north, in a V.I.P compartment 02br
00Probably to study creation management 02br
00Hence, the prophet was left without a word 02br
00Without a trace of the runaway lord 02br
00Now, every morning, my king of messengers 02br
00Rises among the swarming hordes of passengers 02br
00ON the eighth platform, he tunes and tallies his hollow words 02br
00To the rusty blues of grim railroads 02br
00He blesses those who miss the train 02br
00A portion of his holy jar kills the pain 02br
00The prophet of the south station 02br
00Never casts love or damnation 0-
  

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0 Hello x 02br 02br 00Those are interesting. I particularly like the passengers/messengers rhyme. 02br 02br 00What is the 'bottling off'?

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0 Hello x 02br
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00Those are interesting. I particularly like the passengers/messengers rhyme. 02br
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00What is the 'bottling off'? 02br
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0 Hello, Maestro, 02br
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00 Thank you, and 'bottle off' is an expression often used by a friend for 'run away' and when I asked him 'where it comes from?' he pulled out his Collins digital pocket dictionary and there it was among the synonyms for 'run away'. I couldn't find it anywhere else, but I like it 02br
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0 I was about to forget, I know that we 'tune to'and 'tally with', but I needed the three T in a row,is it correct to say 'tunes and tallies to...' or should it be absolutely' tunes and tallies with' 02br
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0 I'd say 'to' fits quite well. 02br
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00As for bottling...I've only heard 'bottle off' in this kind of connection: 02br
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001. The band played abysmally, and were bottled off the stage. 02br
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00i.e. they were forced to retreat in a hail of beer bottles. 02br
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00Related verbs are 'bottle out', 'to have
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0 Goodness me! You really are a genius Mr.P! You seem have mastered everything in the world of English Literature and Language... 0-
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0 I have a special interest in bottles... 0-
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0 Hello, Mr. pedantic, 02br
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00 Thank you for all this mephistophelean informations about the bottle, as I read it, I can feel the cold sweating body of a glass of Guinness or of a Lefe between my fingers, you should consider that for someone who lives in a place where there is nothing but pubs, bars, night clubs,...the temptation could be unbearable. 02br
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0 There's also "bottle in", used when you refer to feelings you keep locked up inside, but little do I dare mention it after MrP's thorough survey of the bottle... 02br
00Cheers! 0-
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...Who bottled off on the seventh night...

It's a mysterious phrase, in this context; but none the worse for that. I'd be inclined to keep it.

{hic}

MrP
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0 Wow nicework!! 02br
00Both pieces havea smooth rythym and flow, i like it alot! 02br
00keep up the good work05002br
00i agree with Mr P the phrase seems to fit with "bottled out" 02br
00mysterious but it flows well and gives it a unique spin 02br
00and hey its creative licence right?! 010id1
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