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I am suppose to agree or disagree with this quote
"You've got to believe. Never be afraid to dream"

I disagreed but I am not very sure if i made any sense.

"You've got to believe. Never be afraid to dream", a quote by Gloria Estefanis. It means that people have to believe he or she can do great things and don’t stop dreaming about them, for he or she will eventually get there. I disagree with her quote because I believe that everyone should to set a destination for themselves. Dreams are dreams, sometimes those dreams will not come true. Instead of dreaming, set a destination, it gives people a sense of direction. It is a direction that teaches and guides people to their final destination or “dream”.

Oliver01 · Accepted Answer

Here are a few suggestions.

I disagree with her quote because I believe that everyone should to set a destination for themselves

So there is a modal verb use error there.

I disagree with her quote because I believe that everyone should set a destination for itself

Dreams are dreams.

You might want to change that. That sounds like stating the obvious.

I know what you are trying to say by that sentence. Try incorporating the definition of dreams to the sentence as opposed to just saying dreams are dreams

AlpheccaStars · Answer

It is a good counter-argument, but some people would say that your destination should be a little bit challenging, and definitely something that is exciting and rewarding. Does that qualify as a "dream"?

Anyway, here are some suggestions:

"You've got to believe. Never be afraid to dream", a quote by Gloria Estefanis. (This is not a complete sentence, but a fragment. Think about making a sentence.)
It means that people have to believe he or she can do great things and don’t stop dreaming about them, for he or she will eventually get there. (Is this your interpretation or opinion? "It means ..." is more of a factual statement. )

I disagree with her quote ... (You probably mean that you disagree with that philosophy, or the sentiment in the quote.)
...because I believe that everyone should to set a destination for themselves.

Dreams are dreams, sometimes those dreams will not come true. (This sentence contains a grammatical error called a comma splice.)

Instead of dreaming, set a destination, it gives people a sense of direction. (This sentence contains a grammatical error called a comma splice.)

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