Hung Sai Cheong Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
Dose it sound natural?
"You convinced me not to romanticize sadness but I can't help and look you in the eyes that are looking in the sky. "
It's just a sentence the came up in my mind few days ago and I want to make sure it's grammatically correct.
It's just a sentence the came up in my mind few days ago and I want to make sure it's grammatically correct.
Top answer
In terms of syntax, there is nothing incorrect. But it is not very sensible, and maybe it's not what you intend.
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In terms of syntax, there is nothing incorrect.
But it is not very sensible, and maybe it's not what you intend.
But it is not very sensible, and maybe it's not what you intend.
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"You convinced me not to romanticize sadness but I can't help and look you in the eyes that are looking in the sky. "
The part before 'but' is fine.
The part after 'but' is unclear in meaning, awkward and unstructured.
eg What is it that you can't help? The romanticizing
The part before 'but' is fine.
The part after 'but' is unclear in meaning, awkward and unstructured.
eg What is it that you can't help? The romanticizing
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I was trying to describe a picture in my mind that I was looking in a girl's eyes and she was looking in the sky. Could you get it when you first read it?
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Hung Sai Cheong I was trying to describe a picture in my mind that I was looking in a girl's eyes and she was looking in the sky. Could you get it when you first read it?Not really.
"You convinced me not to romanticize sadness but I can't help but look you in the eyes as you are looking at the sky. "
"You convinced me not to
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@Alphecca The first one is better. It's cleaner. Thanks for your help.
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