Does my translated CV need corrections? Thank you

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Hi everyone!I just translated my CV from French to English (British English) and it would be so nice if a native speaker could have a quick look at the extracts written below, to tell me please if something is not understandable or not well expressed, and if I made mistakes. Thank you a lot for your time and your help!Store clerk in a grocery store specialized in deep-frozen food:Customer reception and cash handling, Participation in stocktakings, Shelf-stacking and products storage respecting the standards of food hygiene.Shop assistant in charge of the plush departement in a toy shop:Carry out just-in-time stock management, Guarantee the attractiveness of the department by designing and manufacturing transient decorating, Perform merchandising instructions , Handle customers reception and transactions.Restaurant crew in a fast food:Customer service at the counter and at the drive-in, Salad preparation, french fries and « finger food » cooking,  Assure the cleanliness of the restaurant, kitchen worktops and cooking instruments.Employee (a job halfway between order picker and machine operator for school canteen cards)Manufacturing material stock management, Placement of orders to subcontractor, Card coding, Pre-delivery check and shipping.Thanks again!

Dave Phillips · Accepted Answer

If you send me your entire CV I'll look at it for you.  I believe the layout and format of the CV to be almost more important than the grammar.  Layouts do vary from country to country, and job to job.  Send more details and I'll help.

Dave Phillips · Answer

You can post here and omit your contact details.  I would only put a email and maybe a phone number on a CV anyway rather than a full address.

Ayeli · Answer

Sorry it took me a long time to answer, I needed to remove all the personnal details from my CV.
This is approximately what my complete CV looks like, once again thank you for helping me!

NAME

EXPERIENCE	Store clerk Company, Town Grocery store specialized in deep-frozen food		Dates
	Participation in stocktakings Customer reception and cash handling	Shelf-stacking and products storage respecting the standards of food hygiene
	Shop assistant Company, Town In charge of the plush departement in a toy shop		Dates
	Just-in-time stock management Handle customers reception and transactions Perform merchandising instructions	Guarantee the attractiveness of the department by designing and manufacturing transient decorating
	Restaurant crew Company, Town The Belgian fast food company		Dates
	Customer service at the counter and at the drive-in Salad preparation, french fries and « finger food » cooking	Assure the cleanliness of the restaurant, kitchen worktops and cooking instruments
	Employee Company, Town A job halfway between order picker and machine operator for school canteen cards		Dates
	Manufacturing material stock management Placement of orders to subcontractor	Card coding Pre-delivery check and shipping
EDUCATION	Bachelor's degree in Art History University, Town Baccalauréat (High school diploma) High school, Town	Year Year
LANGUAGES	French: mother tongue Conversational English
ACTIVITIES	Latin dancer at the amateur level, with performances within a group for music festivals.
ADRESS	home adress E-mail adress	phone number

Ayeli · Answer

The "D" letters which can be seen on the right side are meant to be the "Dates" (my arrival and departure dates from each company)

Dave Phillips · Answer

I'll have a play with it later for you. You need a profile (a discribtion of you written in the third person eg. Hardworking, Trustworth etc. Try to think of a few words that aren't on everybody's CV. Also Key Skills - These relate to the job you are applying for. I'll send a format when I reply.

DP

Ayeli · Answer

Ok, I think I got the idea. Here is a profile example I found : "A dynamic, team-spirited and
results oriented individual seeking to utilize analytical skills and experience to contribute your
organization's growth and objectives in the international area"

Of course I'm not going to copy this! I'll find my own way to tell that I'm the best person that could ever be for the job I will apply for

As you said the key skills must be related to the job: as I'm not applying for any job right now (but I soon will be) I think i'll wait and see the job description to help me writing this paragraph.

Thank you for this good advice!

Dave Phillips · Answer

Just got home so haven't had chance to do anything. Don't put you address or age on it you don't need to and it saves changing it all the time.

Here's a copy of one I did for a friends with Shop Experience:

Name

Contact number

Email

Personal Profile:

A sales professional with management experience who has decided to further her education in the Marketing and Management area and is keen to find a part time weekend Sales Executive job in order to support future goals. Self motivated and result driven with excellent track record of customer service and people skills.

Key Skills

· Customer Service with more than nine years of retail experience.

· Interpersonal

· Reliable, responsible and able to deliver results.

· IT literate

· Languages - Portuguese and English (Fluent)

Italian and Spanish (Spoken)

Education

2007 – 2008 Professional Diploma in Management

Institute of Leadership and Management (United Kingdom) sponsored by Harrods Knightsbridge - London

2006 Professional Certificate in Marketing Planning (CIM)

London School of Marketing (United Kingdom)

Qualifications:

· 1996 – 2000 BA (Hons) Journalism at IVE University (Brazil)

· 1993 – 1996 BA (Hons) Social Communication - Radio and TV at Federal

University of Mato Grosso (Brazil)

Career history

2000 – 2009 Harrods Knightsbridge – London UK

Sales Executive

Food Halls Sales and Retail Manager 2007/2009

Member of Harrods Guest Shopper Commission 2008

Customer Relationship with excellent guest shopper result records

Working for different areas of the Food Business

Tea and Coffee Assistant Manager 2006

Tea and Coffee Department Stock Controller 2005

Tea and Coffee Department Trainer and Team Leader 2003/2004

1999 – 2000 Folha do Estado Newspaper - Brazil

Reporter

Writing articles and editorials in the Economic and Politics

1999 – 2000 Culture Office of the Estate of Mato Grosso - Brazil

Press Advisor

Organising cultural events, press conferences and interviews.

1998– 1999 Project Manager

Ministry of Education – Brazilian Federal Government

Organising training for journalists and radio professionals in the Estate of Mato Grosso.

1998 – 1999 Journalism - Editor and Reporter

Radio System 2000 Cuiaba – Brazil .

Project Managing new Radio Journal Format

1996 – 1998 Journalism – Radio Reporter / Interviewer

Group Gazeta of Communications – Brazil

Interviewing and editing

1997 Health Office of the Estate of Mato Grosso - Brazil

Press Advisor

Creating and editing a monthly News Letter (editing, interviewing).

1996 – 1997 Sales Executive

‘Publliks’ Publications Magazine - Brazil

Sales and Customer Relationship - Meeting with clients and selling adds

1994-1995 Press Advisor Assistant

Federation of Industries of Mato Grosso – Brazil

Organising interviews and events in the Industry Sector

1993-1994 Sales Executive

Bella Casa Furniture

Meeting with clients and selling bespoke kitchen and bedroom units

Interests

Travelling and experiencing other cultures.

Cycling and cooking.

Reference

Upon request

Hope this helps and gives you ideas.

Ayeli · Answer

Yes it does! Thank you so much for your time!

Ayeli

Dave Phillips · Answer

Je vous en-prie.

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