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Petusek Posted 13 years ago
Grammar

Disparate coordination? [(X to) and (Y of)] (Z)

Hello everybody,

Trying to translate a list of features of a device into English, I've come across an item in the form of a coordinating structure that sounds a bit weird already in the original language.

In English, it might be something like

"...
Physical access and data acquisition in the field
..."

It could be somewhat ambiguous as to what exactly "physical access" is supposed to refer to - the device or the data? On the other hand, it may not matter at all after all, as you actually need the device to collect the data in the field, so...I'm afraid I'm a bit confused.

The above item is further explained in the original text as follows:

"...
- a possibility to connect a computer to the device via a USB connector, or to download the data directly from the micro SD card within the device
..."

Anyway, what are your opinions?

I will be thankful for any comments, suggestions or advice.

Thank you!

Best,

P.
  

Top answer

"Physical access and data acquisition in the field" As a summary of a feature of a device or product, this means: (a) Physical access (to something unspecified) AND (b) data acquisition (again, not clearly specified) ... in the field. In other words, two separate and not necessarily related things that can be done "in the field".

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"Physical access and data acquisition in the field"

As a summary of a feature of a device or product, this means:
(a) Physical access (to something unspecified)
AND
(b) data acquisition (again, not clearly specified)
... in the field.

In other words, two separate and not necessarily related things that can be done "in the field".

There is no ambiguity abo
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Thanks a lot for the elucidating response, KrisBlueNZ!

I've now completed a quick draft version of the translation (of a two-page brochure), but I'm not sure I can post it here and bother you or any other members of the forum with it. Quite naturally, I'd be extremely thankful if somebody went through the text and checked it.

As for the purpose of the device, I think it do
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petusekI've now completed a quick draft version of the translation (of a two-page brochure), but I'm not sure I can post it here and bother you or any other members of the forum with it. Quite naturally, I'd be extremely thankful if somebody went through the text and checked it.
Ah, a**-kissing. Works for me :-)
petusekAs for the purpos
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Wonderful, KrisBlueNZ!

Thanks a lot. I'll apply some of the changes and send you the draft if that's ok. Thanks a lot in advance!

P.

P.S.: As to "Some of the features...", that was completely my mistake. What I should have written was "Some of the features the brochure mentions include", you know, as the list was mine - no silly advert intended here! :-) I was just tryin
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Re "some of the features ... include", please read my comment carefully. The problem is nothing to do with "the brochure mentions"; the problem is the redundancy of some and include.


GSM/GPRS data transmission
Measurements are sent to the server in at preset intervals.
Own data servers
All data is stored on our own secure serv
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KrisBlueNZ wrote:

> Some of the features include:
Personally, I think it's redundant to use some and include together like that. It also sounds like crass advertising-speak; perhaps the person who wrote it thinks that he would be even more convincing if he wrote "Just a sample
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KrisBlueNZ wrote:

GSM/GPRS data transmission
Measurements are sent to the server in at preset intervals.
Own data servers
All data is stored on our own secure servers, where it is available to you.
Physical access and data acquisition interrogation in the field
It is possible to suggest
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Corrections part 2

GSM / GPRS data transmission
If we use the built-in quad-band GSM / GPRS modem transmits measurement data over TCP/IP to the server and sends alarm messages via SMS. The and the suggest pre-installed GSM antenna , which can may be replaced by with another type depending on the signal intens
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KrisBlueNZ wrote:

Each channel can be named as needed; data can be recorded using different periods at varying intervals (1 second to 24 hours), ; measurement (analogue value, counter, binary status, engine hours here in New Zealand, the normal expression is "equipment hours") and/or logging modes. It is possible to suggest Y
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Corrections part 3 of 3


Sensors and Probes
A great advantage is the ability to connect intelligent sensors that communicate via RS485 RS-485 using the HART protocol and have better more advanced features than simple (optional) analogue probes. It is very easy to work with a connected probe after automatic loading